*coco

Hiya, Solvalery! A million and one apologies for the late review, you caught me just a few days before I went on holiday. Anyway, I'm back now and I hope ...

Hey, Proseithion! Coco here as requested! I don't normally do Sci-fi but I had a look at this and...well...I loved it! I was so engrossed in the story that I ...

Hiya, Pink! Thanks for the request - how could I possibly say no when your reviews have been what has kept me going for my story :D Right, onto the ...

Hiya, Ofir! Good to have you back :) Here are some sentences I've picked up that need improvement/explanation/change The same brown eyes Davy had flickered to scrutinize me , and ...

This is good - of course, when I think of 'chav's' I think of teenage girls from Newcastle and Manchester riding BMX bikes donned in adiddas tracksuits and mackenzie t'shirts, ...

Hiya, Ofir! So you asked me to re-review and here I am :D I'm really happy with the improvements you've made - the story reads so much better now which ...

I winked at a random man on the bus...he was about 70 years old (I was bored)

Skeen - your review is complete! An ivisible high five for your request :D Diane - your review is complete :) Sionarama - I think I've found your story - ...

Oooh! Me next!!! Josh Hartnett - what more can I say...I mean...just look at him *dies* Jonathan Rhys Meyers - he's a total alcoholic but he's still totally gorgeous! Paul ...

This is me, but in a poem! I loved it, Derek :) *coco

Hiya, Diane! Coco here as requested! I had problems with a few sentences: “Its ours,” Aiden said, pointing to a small cottage . The dialogue could definitly be improved here ...

Hiya, Diane! Coco here! I wasn't quite sure what to make of this chapter because, again, it seems like you have some problems with consistency among your character's emotions. Zankoku's ...

Coco here! There were a few sentences that confused me: I shrieked an inhuman sound and flopped to the ground I'm not very fond of that line, especially the word ...

Hi, Diane! Me again :) I completely agree with Tenyo again. You have this amazing skill as a writer to be able to describe the atmosphere around Asha so beautifully ...

Hiya, Diane, coco here! So this chapter was pretty thought, I hoped it would have been longer. As far as Asha's emotions, they have definitely improved, although she still doesn't ...