Happy Sunday! Been extremely busy with assignments, essays, and studying for finals (and also preparing for the holidays).
Hope you all are doing well, just wanted to stop in and share the good news of God sending His son Jesus to be a living sacrifice for me and for you.
Much joy and peace~ ♡♡♡
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Lullaby Thank you Rose! It was a little difficult to find a wallpaper that would repeat seamlessly but I got lucky
Dec 4, 2023
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AilahEvelynMae Youre amazing lullabyHappy sunday to you too! praying for you!
Dec 3, 2023
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Belle!! I love that movie, both the animation and the real one. Maybe you would want to be a part of A Big YWS Family Picture To Remember 2023!
Lullaby Thank you for the idea! Just did it
Dec 3, 2023
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So proud of anyone who finished or participated in NaNo this year! You’re all such incredible writers and the ambition and passion is so wonderful! Keep up on all the amazing work. I may not have participated but I’m defrosting for NaPo :3
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2016: 6 poems
2017: 12 poems
2018: 8 poems
2019: 27 poems
2020: 18 poems
2021: 38 poems
2022: 41 poems
2023: 49 poems and counting
This doesn't include NaPo poems from 2023, random documents full of random bits and pieces of poetry, or poetry I no longer have. I did delete a lot of poetry for personal reasons, but my collection is still growing and evolving.
I have loved poetry for so long, how could I ever stop?
AilahEvelynMae That is so amazing
Nov 27, 2023
OrabellaAvenue That's true! So amazing! (Also you write more poems per year than I usually read... anything XD )
Nov 28, 2023
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I was reading @Liminality 's review of my poem Can Nature Be Haunted Too and decided to edit it a bit to make it a bit more of a cohesive work rather than the last two lines feeling a bit out of place given the context.
I primarily tweaked the ending.
The old:I watch and listen to the somber
Symphony of tickling whispers,
And awaken to a moth stuck on the ledge
Waiting for me to sing it back to safety.
Can nature be haunted too,
Or just the places most sacred to us?
The new:I watch and listen to the somber
Symphony of tickling familiar whispers,
And awaken to a moth stuck on the ledge.
Its stare sends shivers down my spine,
As I become aware I am being watched.
Can nature be haunted too,
Or just the places most sacred to us?
The purpose of the changes and meaning of the poem:
The last two lines inspired the entire poem. I was pondering on why it seemed only homes or buildings were haunted places. I wondered if places like meadows, or the animals/insects around us could be haunted too. I also wanted to tie in the idea of being personally haunted by past regrets, lost relationships, etc.
I added "familiar" to the line about listening to the ghosts to reference the narrators personal ghosts. This "dream" they have has people or events that haunt them. The moths in this poem represent an eerie figure in the "real world" that almost scares the narrator.
I also attempted to tie the two separated parts together with lines that emphasize the eerie emotion and perhaps fear the narrator feels. The moth being on the ledge scares the narrator because it is something watching them, similar to how ghosts seem to just watch.
I completely took out the line "waiting for me to sing it back to safety" because I don't believe it made sense. I think it felt like a pretty line so I included it but didn't think of the purpose it served.
Lastly, in the last line, "places most sacred" can refer to both a home or someone's mind, as the mind is something very personal. This can refer back to the dream the narrator has.
Overall, I know the poem is perhaps still not perfect but I did feel like changes were necessary and I am super appreciative of Liminality's review which gave me insight on what felt off about the poem. Hope these changes and my train of thought helped improve the experience of the poem!
I really do enjoy experimenting with darker moods and images and bringing those to life in my writing.
Much love ~ ♡
Liminality Ooh I really like those new lines! The poem seems to flow better with them and I like that they match the theme of ‘haunting’ too, with the moth watching the speaker. Your thoughts on the poem’s meaning and your editing process were really interesting to read. I definitely saw some of those aspects when reading the poem, and the exploration of the concept of ‘haunting’ is really neat
Nov 29, 2023
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I think we admire the moon so much because it is the most peaceful way to appreciate the sunlight without the harshness of it all
Quillfeather This could absolutely be a line in a poem omg
Nov 27, 2023
OrabellaAvenue It really could! I love this thought...
Nov 27, 2023
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I am really happy to be getting my degree in something I am passionate about but I am deeply scared as I have no idea what I want my career to be.
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Yesterday, my boyfriend and I were walking through a public cemetery in his hometown, and there’s something poetic about all the fake flowers that cannot die accompanying the tombs and graves of those who have passed. Perhaps I’ll write about it.
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AilahEvelynMae <3333 that is amazing!
Nov 24, 2023
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Oh my!! I got on to wish everyone a Happy Thanksgiving just to see that I’m Featured Member!! Wow wow thank you everyone so much for all the support and comments. My heart feels so full!!! <33 you’re all wonderful and I’m so grateful
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Dec 4, 2023