Young Writers Society

Welp Adios folks. I'm leavin the site. Thanks all for a great welcome and time here. Thanks Sensei @Quillfeather for helping me out with any question I've asked. I've had a great time in the chat wit everyone... at least everyone who was there.

My reason for leaving, some may find it stupid or silly but
i don't because I'm a christian and believe God told me to get off this site and don't take offense by that quote (because I know some people who will)

Will I return? Probably not. I dunno

*sighs* this was the best website for writers I've found. Sad to go, but when God says go, I gotta go no questions asked.

Peace out you Amigos and Amigas

Don't know how to delete account so... My accoun't will be up I just wont be on it


I came here randomly and I'm leaving randomly lol XD

A belated welcome to YWS!

Oh yeah, and 2/4 of reviews suggest that I change the name I fully agree on this... just give me a couple of months or a year to think of a name. unless someone else has a name for me
as you can tell I suck at names

Let's gooo! Another awesome review on the Jacobs
Thanks! @SkyJayde for reviewing
and all reviews have been positive so far!
Almost done editing it too!
I'm gonna go celebrate
Bring out the Cake!!

Random Question that's been on my mind all day:
Do you think it's possible to give good life advice?... And still suck at life

It's now been updated to three awesome reviews for the Jacobs!
Thanks @foxmaster for Reviewing!
I've almost edited everything everyone has suggested... again I'm slow editor... ok fine, you caught me again it's procrastination...it's not laziness, if you're still being productive

welcome! I know this is late but don't mind that.

Yippie got two awesome reviews for The Jacobs!
Thank you @Echo924 and @rubyxbanks for the reviews
I've edited mostly everything you said needed to be corrected... I'm a slow editor... ok, you caught I procrastinate too much

I'm alive, bored and currently wondering why this site has a genre for chickens so... I'll post a second snippet of The Solis Effect
Context: April beat a mutated beast with a bat
*Kira and Miles walk in laughing*

KIRA
That doesn’t count as beating me in chess

MILES
I think it should

KIRA
You threw the chessboard across the room

MILES
Because you cheated

KIRA
Whatever, we’re back Dad... Why are you tied up to a chair

EHNOS
So he doesn’t foil our plans

*Echo and April come running in*

ECHO
I told you, you shouldn’t have repeatedly done that

APRIL
He’s on the floor in pain. I’m pretty sure it was a good move.

ANTOCK
I have two questions

ECHO
Shoot

ANTOCK
What did April do?

ECHO
She hit the mutated beast in the shins

APRIL
It’s called tactical advantage

ECHO
How did you know that would work

APRIL
He’s still human and what’s one human's main weakness? Their shins

Dang just found out the first person to welcome me here. Is no longer active on the website @Lucrezia. We've only talked once, but you did make me feel very welcome. Thank you for that and goodybye

Ain't got no school today! So another snipper of The Solis Effect
Solis Effect context: Just Echo and Kira being siblings and a tad bit of foreshadowing

ECHO
Dad’s on edge still Kira so if we get caught you're taking the blame

KIRA
(rolls her eyes)
You worry too much little brother

ECHO
I do not
(Rolls his eyes)

KIRA
You always worry

ECHO
You can’t prove that... Wait, did you just call me little brother?

MILES
How are you just now realizing that

ECHO
Yes, I’ve just realized this

KIRA
Is there a problem with me calling you little brother?

ECHO
Yes, I’m your older brother

APRIL
Don’t take such offense to it

KIRA
Plus not like you act like it, anyway

ECHO
And what does that mean

APRIL
She’s saying she acts more mature than you

ECHO
You can fight me
(Puts his fist up to Kira and scowls her)

APRIL
Yeah, I can go get my bat, and fight you

ECHO
(Raises his eyebrows)
On second thought we can choose peace

MILES
Just saying the day Kira becomes mature is the day the world ends

KIRA
Can we just go, please?

ECHO
Ugh fine, we can go, but what about security? How are we gonna get past it?

KIRA
We don’t need to get past security

MILES
Guys

ECHO
Dad doesn’t want us in his lab. He told security to keep us out

APRIL
Kira and Echo!

KIRA
But dad loves when come to the lab

MILES
Hello you two

ECHO‌
No, dad loves when we call to see if we can come to the lab

KIRA
But dad hates it when we call him when he’s at work

APRIL
Solis twins!

Echo Kira say in unision
What!

MILES
Look, April knows a shortcut that should get us into the lab without having to go through security

ECHO
Oh.

KIRA
Don’t call us the Solis twins again

MILES
Why do you hate the name

ECHO
It just bothersome

KIRA
Yeah, makes us feel like we're forgetting something

ECHO
Plus we're not twins

Another snippet of The Solis Effect... well a whole scene, I should say
Solis Effect context: Just Miles being outnubered to leave the arcade

INT. ANTICORE ARCADE - AFTERNOON

Miles is playing an arcade game April and Echo are watching him

ECHO
Ok I’m bored now

MILES
What? How are you? Bored. We’ve barely played this.

APRIL
Miles, we’ve beaten these games one too many times,

Kira *is Leaning on the Machine asleep*

ECHO
You see Kira got so bored she fell asleep on the machine

APRIL
Hey Kira, wake up!

KIRA
(wakes up)
Huh what happened?

MILES
Nothing. You fell asleep on the arcade machine.

KIRA
(stretches)
Oh yeah sorry I’m just so bored here now, let’s do something else

MILES
We had a deal. I brought you the plushie and we can stay. I bought the plushie therefore we can stay.

KIRA
Thanks for the plushie, but no the deal was if we came here you had to buy me a plushie

ECHO
Miles, you're outnumbered. We’re leaving.

MILES
But Echo, you love the arcade too

ECHO
Yeah but it gets boring when no one is here and when you played every game there is

APRIL
I have an idea. Let’s go sneak into your guy's dad's lab.
(Smiles)

KIRA
Yeah, that sounds fun!

ECHO
Kira, no dad is already on edge
(Shakes his head and steps back)

KIRA
He wouldn’t mind us going into the lab

ECHO
even if we did, we’d have to get past security. Which ain’t gonna be easy.

APRIL
Don’t worry about security

MILES
Yeah, we went there yesterday. They looked like they were ready to sleep for the next ten hours.
(Laughs)

KIRA
what were you two doing at our dad's lab yesterday

MILES
April lead the way
(Swiftly turns around)

ECHO
Hey, answer the question

APRIL
Ok follow me guys
(Whistles and walks away)

I'm reading so many stories, poems, and scripts, most of them were very interesting. I was thinking about leaving a review, and in the middle of writing it I realized. The entire review I made was a joke.(no literally it was all jokes not the good one either)

as far as I know, reviews are supposed to help people with their stories... So what I'm saying is

where are all the comedic stories? Yeah I've seen a few and there some funny stories, but I mean a story with nothing but comedy in it. now that would be a easy story to review

I would try to review poetry but it confuses me too much. so.. never gonna try that again

So I'll post random snippets of my scripts and short stories here

I got no points right now so I'll post a snippet of my script

The Solis Effect context: the MCS just found a dark cage and got a bit too curious

MILES
I’m curious. But not curious enough to open the cage.
(takes a step back)

KIRA
Come on April, please let us open the cage

ECHO
What’s the worst that can happen? Worst-case scenario, it’s not a dog.

APRIL
Fine, I’ll unlock the stupid cage *pick the lock.*

Tavarious *comes out of his cage*
I smell blood

ECHO
Dogs don’t talk, do they?!

APRIL
Last time I checked, no they don't.

KIRA
Dogs also aren’t ten feet tall and stand on two legs

MILES
(mockingly)
It’s probably a dog Miles don’t worry everything will be fine

ECHO
Should we run now?

APRIL
(sarcastically)
No, we planned on staying here to pet the giant puppy

They all run upstairs

So this is supposed to be an status update... ok then Second on this website and still loving it, I wrote two reviews today had fun writing them

Can't say I can give actual feedback to anyone's story... unless you want to hear how to successfully pull off sneaking a joke in a trauma scene.

I'll leave this status update with a serious note:
If you played undertale genocide, then you truly know what pain is when Megalovania starts playing in your dream