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  • Welp Adios folks. I'm leavin the site. Thanks all for a great welcome and time here. Thanks Sensei @Quillfeather for helping me out with any question I've asked. I've had a great time in the chat wit everyone... at least everyone who was there.

    My reason for leaving, some may find it stupid or silly but
    i don't because I'm a christian and believe God told me to get off this site and don't take offense by that quote (because I know some people who will)

    Will I return? Probably not. I dunno

    *sighs* this was the best website for writers I've found. Sad to go, but when God says go, I gotta go no questions asked. :D

    Peace out you Amigos and Amigas

    Don't know how to delete account so... My accoun't will be up I just wont be on it


    I came here randomly and I'm leaving randomly lol XD


    Quillfeather ah, sorry to see you you feel you have to go<3 I am glad I could be somehow helpful<3 If you choose to come back, we are happy to have you, if you don't, we understand<3
    Apr 4, 2023


    foxmaster sorry about that, and we hope you come back but it's ok if not.
    Jul 14, 2023

  • A belated welcome to YWS!


    RandomGuy A belated thanks!
    Mar 30, 2023

  • Oh yeah, and 2/4 of reviews suggest that I change the name I fully agree on this... just give me a couple of months or a year to think of a name. unless someone else has a name for me
    as you can tell I suck at names

  • Let's gooo! Another awesome review on the Jacobs
    Thanks! @SkyJayde for reviewing
    and all reviews have been positive so far!
    Almost done editing it too!
    I'm gonna go celebrate
    Bring out the Cake!!

  • Random Question that's been on my mind all day:
    Do you think it's possible to give good life advice?... And still suck at life


    fatherfig yup- we learn from our mistakes.
    Mar 25, 2023


    RandomGuy That's life for ya
    Mar 25, 2023

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  • It's now been updated to three awesome reviews for the Jacobs!
    Thanks @foxmaster for Reviewing!
    I've almost edited everything everyone has suggested... again I'm slow editor... ok fine, you caught me again it's procrastination...it's not laziness, if you're still being productive


  • foxmaster
    Mar 25, 2023

    welcome! I know this is late but don't mind that.


    RandomGuy Thanks!
    I don't mind it at all

    Mar 25, 2023

  • Yippie got two awesome reviews for The Jacobs! :D
    Thank you @Echo924 and @rubyxbanks for the reviews
    I've edited mostly everything you said needed to be corrected... I'm a slow editor... ok, you caught I procrastinate too much

  • I'm alive, bored and currently wondering why this site has a genre for chickens so... I'll post a second snippet of The Solis Effect
    Context: April beat a mutated beast with a bat
    *Kira and Miles walk in laughing*

    KIRA
    That doesn’t count as beating me in chess

    MILES
    I think it should

    KIRA
    You threw the chessboard across the room

    MILES
    Because you cheated

    KIRA
    Whatever, we’re back Dad... Why are you tied up to a chair

    EHNOS
    So he doesn’t foil our plans

    *Echo and April come running in*

    ECHO
    I told you, you shouldn’t have repeatedly done that

    APRIL
    He’s on the floor in pain. I’m pretty sure it was a good move.

    ANTOCK
    I have two questions

    ECHO
    Shoot

    ANTOCK
    What did April do?

    ECHO
    She hit the mutated beast in the shins

    APRIL
    It’s called tactical advantage

    ECHO
    How did you know that would work

    APRIL
    He’s still human and what’s one human's main weakness? Their shins

  • Dang just found out the first person to welcome me here. Is no longer active on the website @Lucrezia. We've only talked once, but you did make me feel very welcome. Thank you for that and goodybye

  • Ain't got no school today! So another snipper of The Solis Effect
    Solis Effect context: Just Echo and Kira being siblings and a tad bit of foreshadowing

    ECHO
    Dad’s on edge still Kira so if we get caught you're taking the blame

    KIRA
    (rolls her eyes)
    You worry too much little brother

    ECHO
    I do not
    (Rolls his eyes)

    KIRA
    You always worry

    ECHO
    You can’t prove that... Wait, did you just call me little brother?

    MILES
    How are you just now realizing that

    ECHO
    Yes, I’ve just realized this

    KIRA
    Is there a problem with me calling you little brother?

    ECHO
    Yes, I’m your older brother

    APRIL
    Don’t take such offense to it

    KIRA
    Plus not like you act like it, anyway

    ECHO
    And what does that mean

    APRIL
    She’s saying she acts more mature than you

    ECHO
    You can fight me
    (Puts his fist up to Kira and scowls her)

    APRIL
    Yeah, I can go get my bat, and fight you

    ECHO
    (Raises his eyebrows)
    On second thought we can choose peace

    MILES
    Just saying the day Kira becomes mature is the day the world ends

    KIRA
    Can we just go, please?

    ECHO
    Ugh fine, we can go, but what about security? How are we gonna get past it?

    KIRA
    We don’t need to get past security

    MILES
    Guys

    ECHO
    Dad doesn’t want us in his lab. He told security to keep us out

    APRIL
    Kira and Echo!

    KIRA
    But dad loves when come to the lab

    MILES
    Hello you two

    ECHO‌
    No, dad loves when we call to see if we can come to the lab

    KIRA
    But dad hates it when we call him when he’s at work

    APRIL
    Solis twins!

    Echo Kira say in unision
    What!

    MILES
    Look, April knows a shortcut that should get us into the lab without having to go through security

    ECHO
    Oh.

    KIRA
    Don’t call us the Solis twins again

    MILES
    Why do you hate the name

    ECHO
    It just bothersome

    KIRA
    Yeah, makes us feel like we're forgetting something

    ECHO
    Plus we're not twins

  • Another snippet of The Solis Effect... well a whole scene, I should say
    Solis Effect context: Just Miles being outnubered to leave the arcade

    INT. ANTICORE ARCADE - AFTERNOON

    Miles is playing an arcade game April and Echo are watching him

    ECHO
    Ok I’m bored now

    MILES
    What? How are you? Bored. We’ve barely played this.

    APRIL
    Miles, we’ve beaten these games one too many times,

    Kira *is Leaning on the Machine asleep*

    ECHO
    You see Kira got so bored she fell asleep on the machine

    APRIL
    Hey Kira, wake up!

    KIRA
    (wakes up)
    Huh what happened?

    MILES
    Nothing. You fell asleep on the arcade machine.

    KIRA
    (stretches)
    Oh yeah sorry I’m just so bored here now, let’s do something else

    MILES
    We had a deal. I brought you the plushie and we can stay. I bought the plushie therefore we can stay.

    KIRA
    Thanks for the plushie, but no the deal was if we came here you had to buy me a plushie

    ECHO
    Miles, you're outnumbered. We’re leaving.

    MILES
    But Echo, you love the arcade too

    ECHO
    Yeah but it gets boring when no one is here and when you played every game there is

    APRIL
    I have an idea. Let’s go sneak into your guy's dad's lab.
    (Smiles)

    KIRA
    Yeah, that sounds fun!

    ECHO
    Kira, no dad is already on edge
    (Shakes his head and steps back)

    KIRA
    He wouldn’t mind us going into the lab

    ECHO
    even if we did, we’d have to get past security. Which ain’t gonna be easy.

    APRIL
    Don’t worry about security

    MILES
    Yeah, we went there yesterday. They looked like they were ready to sleep for the next ten hours.
    (Laughs)

    KIRA
    what were you two doing at our dad's lab yesterday

    MILES
    April lead the way
    (Swiftly turns around)

    ECHO
    Hey, answer the question

    APRIL
    Ok follow me guys
    (Whistles and walks away)

  • I'm reading so many stories, poems, and scripts, most of them were very interesting. I was thinking about leaving a review, and in the middle of writing it I realized. The entire review I made was a joke.(no literally it was all jokes not the good one either)

    as far as I know, reviews are supposed to help people with their stories... So what I'm saying is

    where are all the comedic stories? Yeah I've seen a few and there some funny stories, but I mean a story with nothing but comedy in it. now that would be a easy story to review

    I would try to review poetry but it confuses me too much. so.. never gonna try that again

    So I'll post random snippets of my scripts and short stories here


    Quillfeather You can search t
    Filter the scripts tab with a humor tag
    That might help you find funny scripts, you can do the same with stories

    Mar 21, 2023


    RandomGuy This is the information I needed
    Thank you sensei for yet again helping me

    Mar 21, 2023

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  • I got no points right now so I'll post a snippet of my script

    The Solis Effect context: the MCS just found a dark cage and got a bit too curious

    MILES
    I’m curious. But not curious enough to open the cage.
    (takes a step back)

    KIRA
    Come on April, please let us open the cage

    ECHO
    What’s the worst that can happen? Worst-case scenario, it’s not a dog.

    APRIL
    Fine, I’ll unlock the stupid cage *pick the lock.*

    Tavarious *comes out of his cage*
    I smell blood

    ECHO
    Dogs don’t talk, do they?!

    APRIL
    Last time I checked, no they don't.

    KIRA
    Dogs also aren’t ten feet tall and stand on two legs

    MILES
    (mockingly)
    It’s probably a dog Miles don’t worry everything will be fine

    ECHO
    Should we run now?

    APRIL
    (sarcastically)
    No, we planned on staying here to pet the giant puppy

    They all run upstairs

  • So this is supposed to be an status update... ok then Second on this website and still loving it, I wrote two reviews today had fun writing them

    Can't say I can give actual feedback to anyone's story... unless you want to hear how to successfully pull off sneaking a joke in a trauma scene.

    I'll leave this status update with a serious note:
    If you played undertale genocide, then you truly know what pain is when Megalovania starts playing in your dream


    Quillfeather Really you can put anything in the update status box on your wall and it will be posted there (like this) and it will show up in the Peoples Tab
    The tab is next to the poetry tab on the right and the forums tab to the left.
    (I only mention this because it took me like a month to figure out what the peoples tab was and it was annoying to figure out so late lol)
    I'm sure your reviews are great, although I also feel like I am terrible at reviews... You could try the critique sandwich or smore

    Mar 21, 2023


    RandomGuy Oh ok. Thanks!
    Mar 21, 2023



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