Young Writers Society

Kitchen

Dara is clattering around in the kitchen, and Aisling comes in through the front door.

Dara: Hey honey! Where have you been?

Aisling plops down on a chair at the kitchen table.

Aisling: Oh, you know, just the beach.

There is a close up of Dara, who looks at Aisling with a pale scared face.


Dara (stuttering): Oh… oh, why?

Aisling shrugs.

Aisling: Just walking…

Dara: You could go to the park for walking, or into town with Eva. You know what the doctor said about meeting up…

Aisling [b](interrupting): [/b]Yeah, but I like the beach. Why do you always do that?

Dara: Do what, honey?

Aisling: About the beach… why don’t you like me going there? Has it got anything to do with my coma?

Dara (flustered): No, of course not, honey…

Aisling: It does, doesn’t it? Tell me what happened! I deserve to know.

Aisling stand ups.

Dara: Ugh, honey, please don’t make me….

Aisling: Tell me! If you loved me you tell me.

Dara looks hurt, and then she turns away from her.

Dara: You… you were walking home from a party, on the promenade. It was dark…

Dara’s voice starts cracking.

Dara: You didn’t see him at first.. He must have jumped out on you, the sick bastard. Aisling, he... He...

She starts to cry.

Aisling (Suspicious): What Dara? What did he do?

Dara (outburst): He bloody raped you, Aisling!

She puts her head in her hands and cries even harder. Aisling sits down, stunned.

Aisling(whisper): Oh god... oh god.

Aisling cries too. Suddenly she gets angry.

Aisling (angry): Why didn’t you tell me?!

Dara (hysterical and stuttering): I don’t know Ash. I thought… We thought it’d be better if you didn’t know. It was so awful...Such an awful thing- we didn’t know how you would react. It was hard for us, especially with the suicide...

Aisling (furious): SUICIDE?! I... I commit..?

Dara nods.

Aisling (shocked and fuming): I needed to know this. I can’t believe you didn’t tell me! You were the person who wanted things to go back to normal, well, that isn’t going to happen unless you tell your daughter the truth!

Dara: I’m so sorry, honey, I am. But it’s not just about you! You have no idea what me and your dad…

Aisling: Shut up! You’re not my mum and dad! I need to get out of here. I want to go home!

Aisling picks up her coat and leaves the house.

Dara: Wait, Ash, no!

The scene ends with Dara sitting on the kitchen floor, head in hands crying.

This is REALLY good. I can only imagine all the twists and surprises that can be packed into the story. This was a really good read and I can't WAIT for the rest of it! The idea is basically unused so you don't have to worry about sounding like you took from another story Again, this is SO good!

I am here as requested!
This is truly increadible, and it is incredible because as pazey13 pointed out, this idea is 100 percent origional.
Just one thing, are you trying to imply that her suicide attempt put her into the coma, or is it something else that the viewers find out later?
Oh, and just one nitpick: Towards the end, when Aisling is labeled as (shocked and fuming), I think a sentence there should read "You were the person who wanted things to go back to normal, well, that isn’t going to happen unless you tell your daughter the truth!
I love this, and I hope to read more.
-Alex