Stitches

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I’m stitching my soul together from the latest blow
We try to share needles, but we know
- it’ s never going to work
I feel your pain
And it’s hard to gain your affection
When you have no more to spare

This is my life.
A mix of things all too pathetic
all too meager
to win just, fanciful things as awards
Merely extravagant enough to satisfy,
to crave a late night poetry slam
and to kiss black dotted music sheets goodnight

(Maybe even you)

You know nothing of my past
And I’ll admit I know nothing of yours
But the past is who I am
Fleeting images – some days impressed more
than others
So fading, so haunting,
All regret and remorse
Braving elements on my soul’s open wounds
…which I’m sewing closed –
hoping that there’s some spare thread to sew me to you
Carpe Diem.




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First off, what I liked.

This is my life.
A mix of things all too pathetic
all too meager
to win just, fanciful things as awards
Merely extravagant enough to satisfy,
to crave a late night poetry slam
and to kiss black dotted music sheets goodnight


I really liked this stanza. Not sure why.

I didn't like the random hyphens. Or the random italicized line. It works better without the italics IMO.
"You do ill if you praise, but worse if you censure, what you do not understand." Leonardo Da Vinci

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