This is a Poem

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This is the poem's sign.
This is the poem's second line,
after this line comes the next.
Stay along, and you'll do fine,
here's the next stanza.

A word show bonanza,
This is the second stanza,
it'll be over in ten more words.
Keep on reading this extravaganza,
I wont dissapoint you much.

My writings out of touch,
I must regain its clutch,
with a poem like this,
I hope it isn't too much.
To rhyme the next stanza, giraffe.

Its the five sentence graph,
For the final paragraph,
It'll be the best one yet.
It might even give a laugh,
because it's the end.
Last edited by Sponson Light on Wed Jan 18, 2006 3:44 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Interesting idea, I like it. However a couple of lines didn't seem to make sense, for the sake of rhyming. And "This is the poem's first line," was actually the second line :P Great idea, and with a little touching up, it could be a great poem too.
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Oh whoops, I figured the 4 lines per stanza was over used. So I just went back and stuck in a new line.
:P

I changed the third stanza completely and made it more self aware.
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Heh I agree Matt Bellamy it is an interesting Idea. Like I said about your poem: Batteries I like poems if they are unique and creative and this was one of them...but was giraffe the only word you could think of that rhymes with graph?
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well there was president taft,
and it sounds like graph,
but so does raft,
I dunno.
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Hehe! I like this. It's a very humorous poem. Nice job. It did make me laugh. :)
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