2 Poems

BEAUTIFUL
Petrified by a gaze which I can not even begin to imagine
I never knew something so beautiful existed
I want to hold onto it with my life but I am afraid if I hold it too had then it will die
Why is there such a thin line? Why is life so delicate?
If I even touch you with the tip of my finger will you fade away?
Will I fade away?

RYAN
You were blessed with the gift of beauty and perfection;
The divine legacy of sublimity,
Therefore as a plague upon you; astonishingly granting you flawlessness; making you impeccable
The charisma of your personality, the elegance of your face, the splendid flicking of your hair charms my ever need to just to be with you.

Lovely. Beauty captured in writing, there were some discrepencys with rhythm but didn't care. Oh to be in in love like this would be wonderful, that's how this made me feel.

Well, I can't tell who wrote what, or what wrote who (I know, that makes no sense, ) but I liked both of them. Kind of reminds me of that poem that me and Brad wrote one time. I loved poems that are like a duet...great job.

i liked both of your poems i thiought they were very good and left that "feel" behind as most poems should do. very good job and well done. oh and one more thing, ( ....too had then it will die) did you mean hard or is it just me?
lol

These were really good Black Rose! My favorite, though, is most definitely "Beautiful." I also liked how you have the two in one post, they really compliment each other nicely.
Overall, good job!

I swear I wrote Beautiful but I can't take credit for Ryan because... Well, My friend Ryan wrote it... I have that confersation somewhere but I don't remember. You got to trust me on this one. I'll have to tell him about this. Thanks a lot.

They were both beutiful, I love duet poems like this.
The rythm was a little off but the beutifullness of the poem covered it up.
I really like this one part here:

"If I even touch you with the tip of my finger will you fade away?
Will I fade away?"

I like both poems, and the wording for obth of them are great.

PS I'm no crique.