Flurry

Flurry

Undo the dreams of my night
Touch me to make me feel I live
Hold me so that I can cower
In the radiance that only time could weave.

Wrap me in envy so that I
Seduce the blind and leave
Marks on the stress less zones
And sink in the sky’s eyes horribly deep!

Drench me in lust so I can
Bloom in the betraying space,
Soften me so that I
Droop in the sunshine of days…

Hurt me so that I
Can cry after silence of an age.
Jerk me from this trance
Give me grief, envy and rage…..




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Hmm that brillant, my favourite line was "Bloom in the betraying space"
It seemed rushed though that just my opinion.

Touch me to make me feel I live

Do you mean make me feel alive?

I really liked the poem. But it would be better if it was longer.

beautiful. i like how you worded everything, and its very passionate. the only thing is, its a bit repitive since the structure of the stanzas are really similar. perhaps you could throw in some variety.