It's been a while

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It's been a while
since I've wrote a poem
in this beat-up book of words.
Maybe I've lost my magic
grown beyond the friendship of a pen;
No, I just lost my way
but now I'm back again,
ready for your teachings.
And I'm back
to writing poems
in this beat-up book of words.
Last edited by FruityBickel on Sun Nov 13, 2011 2:32 am, edited 1 time in total.




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Hey there,
Cool. I like your poem.
Maybe I've lost my magic,
grown beyond the friendship of a pen;

I love this part the most. I think the flow of your words are ok.
But take notice on this sentence,
And I'm back,
to writing poems,

You should use root words after to though there is exceptional.
I don't know but I just love this poem. Keep writing :)
Loving in secrecy is my specialty.
What if...I was never here in the first place.




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It's been a while, No comma needed
since I've wrote a poem, No comma needed
in this beat-up book of words.
Maybe I've lost my magic,
grown beyond the friendship of a pen; I like that you call it a "friendship."
No, I just lost my way,
but now I'm back again, Rhyme kind of threw me for a loop.
ready for your teachings.
And I'm back, No comma needed
to writing poems, No comma needed
in this beat-up book of words.


This is a nice poem, even though I get a little weary of poems about poems and writing (and believe me I'm a hypocrite when I say this, I've written a thousand). All the same, this ain't too shabby. I like the idea you have, of it being a friend, of being "lost" for a while. Overall it's pretty nice.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver
Reading is one form of escape. Running for your life is another. ~Lemony Snicket




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Bahahah... Hi there Alex.

This is some neat poem you've got here. A great way to decide you're going to be writing again... by writing. I would've written more about why I stopped writing, it'd make the reader get to know you better and see how the life of a writer goes. xD

But you certainly did a great job.

~Solly<3
Noob is a state of being, not a length of time. ~Ego

"Serás del tamaño de tus pensamientos; no te permitas fracasar."



The blood jet is poetry and there is no stopping it.
— Sylvia Plath