Firebird

An eagle/human falling in love. This is all i have actually... got. I am reworking the ending. So far it is not worthy of people reading because pretty much, it's horrible.
If anybody would like to read it just pm me...

I do not expect much of an in depth response to this, but anything you could do would be greatly appreciated.

An i know the beginning is like... major twilight related. My bad, but it fit so well at the time, and i cannot bear to, myself, change it. NO VAMPIRES so happy reading.

As it is, I've not read Twililght or seen the movie so i can safely say you won't hear me commenting on that at all...

so I'll start reading this today, and I'll post a review/critique when i can later.

This was good, I'll get you an advanced crit done soon, maybe next week...?
-Kirsten xxx

Ah sweet. As I said in the request - whenever you can is all good!

It is Chrissy so I'm thinking the forum might be a little dead crit-wise?

EDIT: Nice work.

niccy_v wrote:It is Chrissy so I'm thinking the forum might be a little dead crit-wise?

You're not the only one who's been thinking that...

I'm reading it now, and I'll edit this and give comments when I'm done, okay? Sounds great, though.

it seems to be just a version of twilight, to similar for my liking but at the same time you have an amazing writing style no matter how similar it is to that of Stephanie Meyher

I loved the story! I had to change a few words here and there but other then that... WOW it was just amazing! Im hoping to read more from you about that! It was something I loved reading, Im glad I got to read it!