Cliff Johnston

Much like yoha_ahoy's required english ballad. The rules: must have a set rhyme scheme (refrain does not have to follow the scheme), a refrain,at least 6 stanzas, a plot, a crisis, and an old-english theme (romantic, loss, grief, etc.). So... I came up with this.

Cliff Johnston

Cliff Johnston, what happened to you?
How am I supposed to feel?
Were you my best friend?
How am I supposed to heal?

Please, stop haunting me
I thought I had forgotten you
Even though I was there that day
I wish I never knew

I told myself over and over
That it never came to be
Yet now I realize,
You I’ll never see

Cliff Johnston, what happened to you?
How am I supposed to feel?
Were you my best friend?
How am I supposed to heal?

I remember that day so crystal clear
It was only me and you
We went walking out on the ice
Then you vanished without a clue

I searched for you forever,
Slowly starting to die,
But there was nothing left of you
And I began to cry.

Cliff Johnston, what happened to you?
How am I supposed to feel?
Were you my best friend?
How am I supposed to heal?


I was desperately looking around,
With tears rolling down my face.
I prayed I would find you soon,
Yet there was no sign or trace.

Then I saw a hole in the ice
And I knew it was the key.
I rushed as quickly as I could.
Please don’t drown on me!

Cliff Johnston, what happened to you?
How am I supposed to feel?
Were you my best friend?
How am I supposed to heal?

But before I could even get there
Something caught my eye,
Stopping me suddenly.
Please Cliff don’t you die!

There you were looking up at me;
I’ll never forget your face.
Your eyes were cold as stone,
Locked in their frozen case.

Cliff Johnston, I’m so sorry;
I should’ve never let you die.
Now I hope you will forgive me
For never saying “Goodbye.”

Why was it you instead of me?
You were my best friend.
And I must ask you,
“Will your death ever end?”

Just some nitpicks:

Cliff Johnston, where are you?
How am I supposed to feel?
Were you my best friend?
What am I supposed to believe?
This was the repeating stanza, yet it bothered me a bit. It was probably because the rhyme established throughout was ABCB and this stanza's rhyme was not quite that.

I told myself over and over
That it never came to be
Yet now I realize,
You I’ll never see
Rhythm here is a little off. I suggest adding something in the 3rd line and maybe rewording the last line.

I searched for you forever,
Slowing starting to die,
Instead of 'slowing' you should have 'slowly.'

As for the poem, it's different, I must say. I didn't have much of a problem with it, besides some little things that are really just my own bothers.

Changed... sorry about the grammar error. Any better?

This is good. Interesting subject kinda creepy. Yeah, some of your rhythm was off and it was choppy. I suggest fixing that and a few of the rhyms maybe. Sorry I don't have much time now but good job, hope you got an A!