The Lost Embrace

Is it right?
To be the one who loves you and stay
Or should we just separate
Cuz you don't feel the same way

How will I live with myself
With that frown upon your face
Because I moved on without you
And you see it through my new love's embrace

You didn't want to commit
Didn't think about making it last
Go with the flow is what you said
Our feelings only clashed

You played me like a toy
Made me feel like I'm worthless
But at times, you made me happy
Made me think of being your Missus

Do you want me or not
Cuz I want you badly
I want to fall in love again
I hope we do, but sadly

You don't want it, you don't love me
I care so much about you
But you don't want to acknowledge it
So what shall we do

Stop being a boy
Right now you're a man
Make your freakin' decision
Make a sort of plan

I won't be here forever
Don't be sad when I leave
Don't blame it on me either
It's something you weren't expecting to see

Don't love me for intimacy
Or for the sexy words I say
Love me for my laughter
That you give me everyday

I love you for you
Why can't you do the same
My heart is not an xbox
It's not a stupid game

So when you see me tomorrow
Look me in the eye
Hold me in your arms
And find the reason why I cry

Once you find it
Think to yourself
Are you using me or do you want me
These things I ask myself

I'll be waiting for the answer
But not for long
My heart is growing weak
And my love for you might be gone

If I get another lover
Hope it's a slap in the face
As you see my new lover love me more
As he gives me a strong embrace

I really did not like this poem. I tried to be optimistic about it, but it was simply immature. The language was a bit off. It did not flow very well, and you used slang. Really?

Do you want me or not
Cuz I want you badly
I want to fall in love again
I hope we do, but sadly

Never use that word there. Slang is not for poetry. I can understand playing around with language, or if there is dialog in the poem, but that should never be in poetry. Next, that stanza as well, was just a bit whiny to me, as was the majority of the poem.

Overall, this poem needs major work. I cannot find a single good word to say about it. I am sorry if this seems rude, but you really have to work on this poem if you want it to be anywhere near good.

-dante93

There's only one problem in this whole entire poem and I would have to say it is the "cuz" it ruins the educated and sophisticated thing of the poem. Other than that it's really, really good. You're an excellent writer.

Because you don't feel the same way

because I want you badly

I like your style of writing up to a point, especially in the beginning, when it seems like your emotions talking. After that it feels like you are exaggerating your feeling, especially towards the end.
I totally believe you have the capability to be an awesome writer, but you just don’t project much of a confidence in your writing.
Remember, you write for yourself. Make yourself proud. You are only 14, and you’ve got a long way to find your self, your approach of writing, so for now, experiment and keep finding new ways to improve your writing!