Kissing the rain?? Title needs help

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Incase you don't read the other poem I JUST posted go read it and this is what it says at the beginning: Hey everyone unsocialbutterfly here aka terrible procrastinator! haha :) I really really really need help with a title for this like asap! It's due tonight and I don't know about you but where I am it's 7 so yeah I reallly need a title! Also do you think it needs paragraphs and where should I put them? Anyways hope you like this.

Fall's passing by
And we say hello to winter
The middle of school
The time for blankets
No more pumpkins and turkeys
We kiss goodbye the rain
And wait for the snow
The beautiful white blanket
That we hope for on Christmas
We say hello to a new start
And leave behind our past
It's time for new love
And new adventures
It's hope and promise
That we hope won't crush us
Snow falls and brings us romance
Cute little cards
And candy hearts
Roses if you're lucky
And by that time we're
Waiting for the spring
And winter goes by
In the blink of an eye
♥unsocialbutterfly♥




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Hello!

I don't think you NEED paragraphs but if you want them this is how I would do it:

Fall's passing by
And we say hello to winter
The middle of school
The time for blankets
No more pumpkins and turkeys

We kiss goodbye the rain
And wait for the snow
The beautiful white blanket
That we hope for on Christmas

We say hello to a new start
And leave behind our past
It's time for new love
And new adventures
It's hope and promise
That we hope won't crush us

Snow falls and brings us romance
Cute little cards
And candy hearts
Roses if you're lucky
And by that time we're
Waiting for the spring
And winter goes by
In the blink of an eye

Ok, my suggestions for a title would be:
Welcomed Change
or
Blinking
or
That Time of Year Again
(I hope these help)


I also have some nitpicky things that I'll tell you but don't listen to me if you like it the way it is. ;)

Fall's passing by
And we say hello to the winter
The middle of school
The time for blankets
No more pumpkins and turkeys
We kiss goodbye the rain
And wait for the snow
The beautiful white blanket
That we hope for on Christmas
We greet the new start
And leave behind our past
It's a time for new love
And a new adventure
It's future and promise
That we hope won't crush us
Snow falls and brings us romance[color=#BF0000(This line you should change because you already said it snowed.)[/color]
Cute little cards
candy hearts and
Roses if you're lucky
By that time we're
Waiting for the spring
so winter goes by
In the blink of an eye

Hope this helps.....
Life is not about how you sing in the sun, it is about how you dance in the rain.




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This is a really lovely poem! I wish I was this good at poetry! Perhaps for a name "New Love" could be a possibility? I am not very good with titles so that's all I could come up with haha.
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