I thought this was actually pretty good, and the lyrics made sense while using words that (in my humble opinion) may have been used just to sound pretty. But that's okay, my favorite band often does that. Words should be pretty. But yes, this was really good and the puncuation seemed accurate enough to my eye. Well, it was going well until the last segment, which boardered on cliche at times. Maybe less about the night/star/light thing? But I liked it
-Renn
'Evil exists in all of us Torak. Some fight it. Some feed it. That is how it has always been.'
"There is always a choice," said Torak, and he backed off the cliff.
