Heartbreak

I've feared heartbreak
and I've experienced it.
I've fallen in love with her lovely eyes
that I have not truly met.
I will remember that love is not for me.
I will though now life my life and let it take me where it wants to.
My heart will now be hidden from inevitable hirt.
I now only fear to lose myself in the process of trying
to not get my heart broken anymore.

Hi there.. Well what you've written is good.. The only thing I find amendable is the length.. It's too short!! Lacks content and that's making it sound incomplete.. add a bit more and I'm sure you'll get a much much better piece..
Harshita:)

This sounds cruel, but it sounds rather boring. It's lacking that flavor or substance to a poem. I agree with the first reviewer; it's too short. I would add more to this so that it isn't as if you're telling us, but showing us also. That is what you should try to do with all of your poems.

The other thing is that 'hirt' should be hurt.

I will though now life my life and let it take me where it wants to.

This line makes no sense. Please reread it again and put some punctuation on it, or else shorten it to make it say your idea more clearly.

I hope you get better. Adios!

Oooh, I love it!
I know the subject is sad but you made it sound sooo... lovely.
There is something captivating in your poem and I liked it really much

JujuMayuDreamer14 wrote:I will though now life my life and let it take me where it wants to.

Are you sure it is not "I will tough live my life"?
I think it makes more sense.

JujuMayuDreamer14 wrote:I've fallen in love with her lovely eyes
that I have not truly met.

I loved this part!!
Congratulations and let us hear from you again soon, okay?