no name

Then cry
When they took the mother
It's all gone
The name
The life
The individuality

the cloudy sky

as a one part
disappeared in the back of the child
while he was growing up without identity

moving
from place to place
family to family
living
without a life

the clean smell of winter
Falls between the cracks
don’t know where to go
and they all just keeping go one
what should he do
where to go
he is wondering
when the rain start to pour

life passed
like a flashlight
in front of his blue blue eyes
when he Swallowed the pills

“just in time”
thought the ‘no name’ boy
“I can’t take it anymore
I am coming mom
to start living again
in heaven”

he opened his eyes
now they're black
“welcome back”
said the doctor

the Operating table
was cold and gray
like the sky
when he came back to life
and saved from heaven
"not again"

Hi there, I don't really understand this poem. I don't think that its because of the subject topic, because that I understand, a boy's mother dies and he takes pills to die and be with her only to come back, but I don't think some of your words were clear when you put them together. For example your first two words were:

Then cry

This doens't really make sence. If it was supposed to go with the next line:

Then cry

When they took the mother

It still doesn't make sence

(The things in blue go together)

They cry Or He cries

When they took his mother

Something like that would make more sence.

Another thing these next lines:

It's all gone
The name
The life
The individuality

the cloudy sky

I don't see how any of this has to do with losing your mother, then again I wouldn't know since I haven't lost a mother. But when you say that the cloudy sky is now gone... wouldn't that be a good thing? Perhaps saying the sunny sky or something like that would be better.

and they all just keeping go one

That line I didn't understand at all.

when the rain starts to pour

A little error there.

as a one part
disappeared in the back of the child

This part I also didn't understand what you were trying to say.

Anyway, I understood what you were writing about and I liked the subject, but I think you should reread it and go over it to see if you can still make the wording different and more understandable. If I'm just stupid today and I'm just not understanding this and everything has a deeper/intentional meaning, then dismiss this review. Haha. So over all good job on the subject matter just make things clearer.
~ Owl

This was truly heart pulling, who wouldn't be messed. I totally felt what he was feeling, at times I got confused and I found myself having to read it over again but I got the idea and better comprehension and I liked it besides the choppiness. I sort of related to this, not having an identity not knowing who the hell you really are. Living but not 'living. I hope to read more from you!

Man, I definitely felt certain aspects of this poem were effective. Lines such as "the clean smell of winter Falls between the cracks" were good because the imagery reminded the reader of personal feelings seemingly existing in the wider world. This is a personal poem and I think it should be read as a personal poem. In terms of structure, many lines did not flow into each other, making it very awkward to read. If you choose to revise this piece, I would recommend removing the one word lines. This technique is effective but only in moderation, i.e. too many 'one word lines' just ends up being meaningless.
Nonetheless, it was heartfelt and I applaud you!