Psalm of the Wanderer

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The maze of the stars
Is Your map above me
When I'm lost.

The howl of the wind
Is Your softly whispered,
"I'm with you."

The crash of the sea
Is the lullaby You sing
When I'm restless.

The fury of the storm
Is Your arms around me
When I'm scared.

The highest of peaks
Are Your powerful shoulders
When I can't keep climbing.

The hamm'ring of the rain
Is the purging fire
You cleanse me with.

The heat of the desert
Is the cup You give
When I thirst for You.

The wonders of this earth
Is the house You've giv'n me
Until I live with You.




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Very nice. Simple but meaningful, with decent imagery. The title is also appropriate, as this really does sound like a psalm. (Obviously psalms can be more complicated than this as well, but many of them are simpler since the important thing is the praise, not the poet's amazing skill.) The only thing I suggest is to make this gear more towards a wanderer - someone far from home or without a home - unless you mean a person who is wandering through life, metaphorically, rather than literally wandering. As in, wandering until he comes home to the Kingdom of God. If that's the kind of wanderer you mean, this is fine the way it is (except that you might want to add at the end something more about the Kingdom being "home" as opposed to the earth). If you meant a more literal wanderer, you may want to get across the point that this person is actually wandering through all these landscapes and has no earthly home to return to.

Other than that, good job. :)

~Blue




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Hi there!

Wow, this is great! I really love it! *clicks like button*

As Blue said before me, this sounds just like a psalm. You did a good job with adding feeling in this. As I read through it I felt sort of secure; it gave me a good vibe. Your imagery is great as well. I know this doesn't make a difference, but I like the way you centered the poem. I don't know, it just looks nicer like that. The only thing I would say negative about this is that it jumps around a lot. You go from the wind to the sea to the mountains, but it all works out in the end. You always ended up saying something at the end of each stanza about Him helping you. So, it all works out.

Keep writing! :)
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This was too amazing for words, honestly. It reminds me of all the things He is capable of. It's pretty heartwarming.(:




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You know, it's comforting to know that many of you are liking this poem... Even more comforting is the idea that we're all headed the same place...




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I love this.
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Why is there not a "Love" button? This was beautiful! I think I might print it off and hang it on my wall to remind myself everyday to thank Him. It was beautiful. :D
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