I'm Too Young For Love Part 2

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You Can Say I'm Crazy But I Don't Want Love

I'm Too Young For Love

I Go Crazy Everyday

I Don't Have Love

I Wish I Had Love

I Want Too Have Love

I Would Love To Have You

Baby Your You're Awesome

But I'm Too Young For Love

I Want It So Bad

Let Me Have Love

Give It In To Me

I Love you

But I'm Too Young For Love

Please, Baby, Don't Go

I Like You And All

But I'm Too Young For Love

I'm Sorry That I Don't Love You

Anymore I'm Too Young For Love

I Got Hurt Before, But I Feel Like I'm Dying Again

I Want To Hug [You or , ] I Want To Be With You

But... I'm Too Young For Love

I Would Love To Care For You

I'm 14 fourteen Your 16 sixteen

I'm Too Young To Get Hurt Again

To Cry I'm Hurt

I'm Bleeding You See

I'm Too Young For Love

I Want Don't Want This

It's Like I'm Such A Fool For Love

I'm Just Too Young for Love

You Can Love Me Or Hate Me

I Got To Keep Moving On

I'm Too Young For Love
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Yay! Part 2! Me likes!

D'aww... this is such a sweet poem.

YouWishYouHadThis wrote:Please, Baby, Don't Go


YouWishYouHadThis wrote:Anymore<-- (I'd put this word on the line above) I'm Too Young For Love
I Got Hurt Before, But I Feel Like I'm Dying Again
I Want To Hug, I Want To Be With You


YouWishYouHadThis wrote:I'm Bleeding, You See


YouWishYouHadThis wrote:Baby, Your You're Awesome


This is amazing! It's all I have to say.

I can see the ambivalence; how the character says he loves her and then he says he doesn't, that is something that happen often when a person feels he's being chained by a feeling. >.< I also noticed there's age difference between your characters, which is the reason for the mixed feelings, and that makes the title better. (I can relate to this poem a lot. Heart vs. Mind xP) Great job.
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I love part 2!!! Its the best, I can actually feel the emotions!! Good job!!




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Nitpicks ¬

You Can Say I'm Crazy But I Don't Want Love

I'm Too Young For Love

I Go Crazy Everyday

I Don't Have Love

I Wish I Had Love

I Want Too Have Love

I Would Love To Have You

Baby Your You're Awesome

But I'm Too Young For Love

I Want It So Bad

Let Me Have Love

Give It In To Me

I Love you

But I'm Too Young For Love

Please, Baby, Don't Go

I Like You And All

But I'm Too Young For Love

I'm Sorry That I Don't Love You

Anymore I'm Too Young For Love

I Got Hurt Before, But I Feel Like I'm Dying Again

I Want To Hug [You or , ] I Want To Be With You

But... I'm Too Young For Love

I Would Love To Care For You

I'm 14 fourteen Your 16 sixteen

I'm Too Young To Get Hurt Again

To Cry I'm Hurt

I'm Bleeding You See

I'm Too Young For Love

I Want Don't Want This

It's Like I'm Such A Fool For Love

I'm Just Too Young for Love

You Can Love Me Or Hate Me

I Got To Keep Moving On

I'm Too Young For Love


Overall ¬

I really did like this piece. XD I can really connect with it, because I like a boy two years older than me, so the poem rings true. My criticism would be that I don't like the fact it is all in Caps. Some reviewers don't mind it, but I just feel it makes it too jumpy as you read the words, kind of LiKeTHiS. But, that's just me. I agree with Stella. It is like Heart vs. Mind. XD Love it. Keep it up becasue you're great.

Yours,

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