For You

Cling to me,
I'll hurt for you.
Live for me,
I'll die for you.
Laugh for me,
I'll cry for you.
Strive for me,
I'll fight for you.
Fly for me,
I'll crash for you.

Doesn't sound fair?
Too good to be true?
What do I ask in return from you?
Just a simple little thing
Won't take too much time,
Just live your life
With me in mind.
Believe in me,
Accept my gift
And I'll show you the truth
The way and the life.

I absolutely loved it! it's short, sweet, and to the point! Also, you've got some fancy skill with rhyme and fluency! Great job!
-LLW

Girl you're awesome!
Each line was so short but the words were so strong! The rhyming and the flow, you stuck to it. The first paragraph just caught my attention, and once it's caught, I can't stop reading till I finish it. You're a pretty good poet. I didn't know you were into poetry. I believe that poeple who can write good poems are very intellegence. I think you're one of those people.
Every word made perfect sense to me. Not a single line confused me which means you're good at getting your message across to other readers in your own poetic way. Do keep writing.

Like the others before I really enjoyed the powerful simplicity of this piece but what really distinguished it for me was the last stanza. The first while beautiful could lend itself to just another self sacrificing lover but it was the justification of it in the second stanza that made it really unique. Good job

While I like the first stanza, the second one seems rather awkward to me. No offense meant.

Did no one get the Christian theme? It was kinda subtle... Maybe too subtle. Thanks for the reviews, though.