Fire's Escape

Fire's Escape

Twisting, turning, writhing, restless,
Jumping out, becoming reckless.
I do not stay confined for long,
But stretching out in tendrils strong.
Only to escape, that is but my one desire,
Some may call me pyra, but my true name is Fire.

Running, fleeing, finally free,
Spreading round, to satisfy me.
I have finally been released,
The world, to me, is now a feast.
But sadly, in the very midst of My Burning,
We start back at the beginning…twisting, turning.

Okay, I thought this was really good. It was just powerful, every line of it, and it was almost compelling. I usually don't like such strict styles of rhyming because it seems to stifle the flow and reduce people's words to a structured form if not done correctly; guess it's lucky for us that you've managed to do this correctly! That is, you were able to build on this structure and use it to your advantage rather than being forced to conform your words around it. It breathed really well. What I'm saying is, good job.
Keep writing,
StoryWeaver

I actually really like this poem! I love how the first line in both stanza's begins with in a way describing what the fire's doing. I also am a fan of personifying things, and a lot of times, people execute it rather poorly, although this is a really well-written poem. I also love the repeating twisting, turning at both the beginning and at the end. Argh, I wish I could offer a little more of a critique rather than a "I like this poem because..." and so on. I'm trying to pick it apart and figure out what's wrong with it, but apparently I'm not a very good picker. Excellent job!!!

I love this! It is so descriptive, and puts a new light on fire. No pun intended...
The word choice was fantastic: "Tendrils," "Writhing," "Pyra..."
I don't usually like poetry that rhymes since it keeps you from using most words, but this was great! The words were absolutely perfect.
I loved this tons, keep writing!

Hey Xreigon!

Thanks for remembering to request me you're new poems! ^^
Makes me feel that at least someone remembers me =)

First off, I would like to say that this Poem is very powerful and that emotion is really felt. It's like the fire is really tough and stuff! That's what I liked the most

Second off, there are one or two parts where it isn't much clear.

About the poem:

Twisting, turning, writhing, restless,
Jumping out, becoming reckless.

I think there is no need of comma in between writhing and restless. It might just as well go off with "writhing restless".
It's the correct way because when you look at the first line, people think there is a mistake somewhere but they can't recognize where! :O So, I just corrected to take that confusion off.

I do not stay confined for long,
But stretching out in tendrils strong

These two lines doesn't seem to be complete. I tried to see what you mean't by it, but just couldn't get what you tried to say through it. I prefer you change it.

Only to escape, that is but my one desire,
Some may call me pyra, but my true name is Fire.

The "Only to escape, that is but my one desire,"
That doesn't make sense at all. You put it the wrong way. It should be "Only to escape, is my one desire".
I know you're trying to rhyme and that's what most people make mistakes on >.< Believe me, I've had the same problem. I keep concentrating on the rhymes and then when I read the poem, some places don't make sense.

So, try to concentrate on the lines you're making and give lesser time on concentrating at the rhyming. ^^

And also the name 'Pyra'. I think it is a name? If not, it may be some other language word but I found it rather not satisfying to me :/ Try to change it, okay? x]

Running, fleeing, finally free,
Spreading round, to satisfy me.

This stanza is perfect! xD I guess I didn't find any mistakes and I'm very happy with that.

I have finally been released,
The world, to me, is now a feast.

"The world, to me, is now a feast."
Meaning? Did you mean that we people use fire to make feasts?
If it is, I prefer you use something else because that is really confusing :S

But sadly, in the very midst of My Burning,
We start back at the beginning…twisting, turning.

Why did you Capitalize 'M & B' is this sentence:
"But sadly, in the very midst of My Burning"
It's fine if it's small-case.

Overall, I think this poem has a very strong meaning and is powerful ^^
You might think I explained a lot of mistakes but you know, they are small compared to other mistakes.
You didn't have any grammar problem and very happy with that too xD

I would give this a 8/10 which is not very bad, you know!

Congratulations for having such a great poem :]
Looking forward to more!

Keep Writing!

Love and Regards,
Cookie or LM <3

Just so everyone understands, "pyra" is fire in Latin.

Oh, I love this! It's always so cool and fascinating when somebody is able to take something (like fire) and describe it perfectly. I especially like it when people can make it rhyme, and here it didn't seem forced at all, which was amazing. I didn't find any grammatical errors, but I did wonder if "My" was supposed to be capitalized or not...

But sadly, in the very midst of My Burning,
We start back at the beginning…twisting, turning.

Just curious. Anyway, this was extremely well written, and I loved it. Keep writing!!