I had you, now I don't

* Dedicated to a special person in my life , whom is now gone.. he's the reason I wrote this poem.

Good memories began the
first day I met you, your smile
made me smile; your charming
looks made my heart sigh til I fell
deeply in love, but you rejected me
now my heart finds it hard to forget
you. I try not to look at your pictures
but your smile tempts me so badly
that I can't keep my mind off of you.
I miss you and I wish you were here
by my side.

Our first outing was amazing I'll
never forget it, it has become the
greatest memory I ever had and I
will always treasure it til the day I
die. I thought I had you, now I don't,
you left me behind and don't
even notice me anymore..

Not a single Text message or call
I've received from your part, I've done
it all for you and I don't get anything in
return. I look at the clock waiting for a
sign, nothing happens.. five minutes pass
I'm still waiting. another hour passes I finally
give up and move on with my personal life
convincing my heart to forget you, that will
be my first task. I will erase you from my head and
and forget you even exist.

When I wake up, you will not be the first thing
that pops in my head , the past is forgotten and
tomorrow is another day to begin with. after tonight,
your memory has been deleted and will torture me
no more. my eyes are tired of crying for you every
night and my heart can't bare no pain, I pray to god
to cure it before it falls into despair, not hate.
What good will it do for me to hate you when I can't
feel it in my heart. Inspite of it all, I want you to know
that I will always love you and I'll never forget you. I
can't force you to be with me , all I can ask is for you to
see how much you mean to me and I'll always include you
in every prayer before I go to sleep. I must leave you
now.

P.S. FAREWELL AND GOOD LUCK!

That's sad but beautiful. I hope that this was written with good intentions, because the end sounds a little on the harsh side. Don't forget them! Just let the memories come and go. <3

Hi there!

Allright, I don't have much to say about this because I can tell that it came straight from your heart. Who am I to critique your feelings? Anyway, this poem was great, I really enjoyed reading it. It flowed really well and you broke up the lines in all the right places. There wasn't anything I found out of sorts and I didn't stumble over what I was reading at all. You definitely put a lot of emotion into this and it paid off.

Just a couple nitpicks:

tomorrow is another day to begin with. After tonight,

Make sure to always capitalize the beginning of a sentence, even if it's in a poem.

night and my heart can't bare no the pain, I pray to God

I think this sounds better with the word 'the' instead of 'no'. And God should always be capitalized.

Overall this is a great poem. Keep writing!

Great!
Reading through this, I only see a few errors. If one weren't paying attention to the grammar, spelling, punctuaction, ect, they most likely wouldn't notice most of them. This poem, I believe, is something that most girls can really relate to. Maybe boys too, I wouldn't know. To be able to make such a very common situation into a poem, I think, is simply wonderful.
Keep writing- Guider