For Luna's Eye's Only...

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Luna, oh luna, my beautiful queen of the night.
The stars that shine above you, the stars the shine below aren’t as bright.
As I compare you to the winter air,
So clear yet cold.
Your dark eyes seem to look through me,
You turn the weak to bold.

Luna, oh Luna, my amazing friend.
If only you knew how much I loved you,
If only you knew how much I cared.
For I am but a star, not the brightest in the sky.
But dark as space, cruel as the night.

Luna, my Luna, dear luna please stay.
For in the end I’ll look up to you and pray.
Dear god, as he’d say today shall pass away,
And tomorrow will be but a memory in the sea of life.
But the future of you will have no end,
For in my heart you are immortal.

Luna, oh Luna. My beautiful queen of the night, my only friend, my true love.
Goodnight, goodnight, goodnight.
Pain is beautiful, when you feel pain you know you're alive. -Criss Angel




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Wow this is really beautiful. I loved it so much. I loved the fact that it felt almost as if you could be talking about the actual moon or a person, which shows how good of a writer you are. Also, I usually tend to stray away from poems that don't have a reoccurring expected rhyme scheme but yours was so great it made it a breeze.
Continue writing please!




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This was sad but very beautiful. It had great nostalgia to it, and I especially liked it because of two things: I love the feeling of the cold breeze at night looking up at the sky, and I love the metaphor "sea of life". This poem brought two of my favorite things together :)

Keep writing!
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