You are beautiful

Staring in the mirror
disgust with what you see
No perfect model
just the normal you and me

You're changing up your look
Ruining your hair
putting on all your make up
more than you can bare

And all of a sudden you forget
that you were made to be you
and you are beautiful
Beautiful the way you are

Don't change
into an empty barbie
don't change
the one you truly are

Because in the end
that's what it's all about:
you are beautiful
Beautiful the way you are

Hi! For me, this is like a cross between christina and bruno....but I believe you if you said it didn't have an influence on your writing. I liked this poem. It had a lovely message. I enjoyed the bit about ruining hair and putting on make-up, because teenage girls tend to do that. However, it was a little plain. Spice up the poem with some more adjectives and describing words. Anyways, great job!
~ Amelia

such a lovely poem i can not think of anything to impove it. It brings great joy to read it and i hope you keep it the way it is.

Hi there. This poem is so... beautiful. QaraQaraQaradear!!! I love this! I would use punctuation, though... but it's okay like it is, punctuation is not obligatory these days. xD Overall: You did a great job!!

Now, some nitpicks:

qaralynn wrote:You're changing up your look
Ruining your hair
putting on all your make up
more than you can bare

This is definitely my favorite stanza. I love how it rhymes. xD'Cause I've actually found myself doing that sometimes, but I'm not going to tell you.

qaralynn wrote:Don't change
into an empty barbie
don't change
the one you truly are

Barbie is a name, therefore it should start with a CAPITAL letter.
P.S. Mentioning her was just perfect.

Keep Writing!

~SollyPlushieeeeee <3

I don't want a single thing to change in this poem. It is wonderful. And bears and ever so true story. People are looking at perfection as beauty, but what makes people beautiful is not only the perfections in life, but also the imperfections. I think someone is truly beautiful when they acknoweledge both things.

As usaul I just rambled into another subject. (I am always told to focous) Okay... the poem: beautiful. My favourite verse was the first one when the person looked in the mirror was not happy.

I don't have much to say,but to anyone who feels this way:

God made you fearfully and wonderful. Thats the way he made you.

Deanie x

I love this piece, simple yet very captivating and full of message. I noticed that you started with the rhyming scheme ABAB in the first two stanzas, and couldn't keep up with that in the subsequent stanzas.
"Because in the end
that's what it's all about: I didn't see the need for a colon here, it's either there is a run-on to the next line or a full stop is put there.
Like I said, excellent piece, keep writing

Hi there!

All right, my comments are in red below.

qaralynn wrote:Staring in the mirror
disgusted with what you see
No perfect model
just the normal you and me
So, this person is disgusted by the fact that they're normal? I love these kind of poems/stories. I hope this person learns their lesson!

You're changing up your look
Ruining your hair
putting on all your that make up Just with the way this is going, I think it'll sound better if you use the word 'that' here. Because this person is changing up their look so they wouldn't be wearing their normal makeup right? Just a suggestion.
more than you can bare

And all of a sudden you forget
that you were made to be you
and you are beautiful
Beautiful the way you are
Aw, this stanza is so sweet. I love it! Lesson time!

Don't change
into an empty barbie I really like this comparison. Who wants to look like Barbie? Not me!
don't change
the one who you truly are I think this line sounds better with the word 'who'. Again, just a suggestion, I'm not trying to change your poem.

Because in the end
that's what it's all about:
you are beautiful
Beautiful the way you are

Overall this is a good poem. You did a good job putting enough emotion into this. I really enjoyed it. Keep writing!