Inure to Time

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What if Time had a friend? Who would this person be? What would he do when Time died?


Waking, he finds that stars are spots-
- Merely pricks of light-
Realms of hot

The inure to Time
Is devoid of rhyme
(Because moments do pass
Like blades of grass)

As a fire roaring^,
His offering’s contrived,
His spirit’s boring,
For- like Time- he hides*

No one sees him tending tinder^,
No one sees him in the sky,
No one cares to hear him utter,
No one pays his toll or fine

If we’d only give our ears,
Then he’d likely go away
He’d stop dropping all these “years”,
And make it always day

Time is funny because it’s never smart,
It doesn’t comprehend the deliciousness of art

On the other hand, Time’s friend
(The one who hides)*
Will portend Time’s lies
To warn mankind!

He’s knows Time will cease,
And then all things will behave.
Time’s friend will no longer be at ease,
And the universe will cave

So, until that day,
Be at ease.
But when Time stays,
Tell Time’s friend, “Pretty please!”




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Wow i'm proud of you this is a great poem i'm not usually into poetry but this wonderful please post some more poems thanks!




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Hello.
The first stanza caught my attention, which it should. There was nice imagery throughout your poem.

At first, I thought your title was a typo, but you used "inure" again in your poem. I don't know this word and can't find it. Merriam-Webster says inure means... to accustom to accept something undesirable or to become of advantage. Neither definition makes sense here. What were you trying to say?

Also, what are the asterisks for? You put it after "hide" both times. Were you trying to mark that these lines didn't quite fit the rhyme? If so, I think it's okay. Reading it through, I hadn't noticed. What I did notice is that the second stanza has a different rhyme scheme than the others. Then, one of them doesn't seem to have a rhyme. That's fine. There are plenty of poems that don't.

I did like it, though. It was an interesting topic, very original.

MM
"One voice can be stronger than a thousand voices, " Captain Kathryn Janeway




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The first thing I'd like to know is just what you're talking about. It's a great poem, and I like the mystery, but it's confusing. Maybe you should clarify on some of it?

Second thing, what are the asterisks and everything else for? Decoration?

All in all, it was really great. I love the title! And the mystery it leaves is pretty amazing. Great work!



Gravity was a mistake.
— Till Nowak