I Am Wind

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I am wind.
Moving so swiftly accross the world,
Imprinting who I am everywhere I go.
I am wind.

You see me in different seasons,
Acting so animatedly,
Dancing all over the world,
Pulling others along with me.

I am wind.
My powers lie within my body,
Captivating all those around me.
I am wind.

You see me moving in so many different ways,
Changing to fit the mood,
The way I am,
My personality.

I am wind.
The way I act only amplifies my passion,
My enthusiasm for the life I live.
I am wind.

When you look at me you see my feelings,
Emotions coursing through the smoke,
That fill my heart,
And shape who I am.

I am wind.
Dancing over the earth around me,
Being as I'll never be again,
I am wind.
Life is what's left when everything is taken from you.




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Hi there!

Wow...this is really good! I enjoyed it very much. There's great imagery. It's written very well; your grammer and spelling are perfect. It flows really well too. There's only one thing I have to correct about this.

You see me moving in so many different ways,

This line sounds better without the word 'so'. It flows better.

Again, this was a great poem. Keep writing! :)
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Hey Passion,

I dig it. Your poem is pretty. I do think you mention " around the world, earth ect..." to many times. I only caught one error:

Moving so swiftly accross the world, across
Imprinting who I am everywhere I go


It was pretty. You do need to watch how long your lines are, to keep the rhythm intact.

That's all!

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