Life

You win some,
You lose some,
Don't take it to heart,
Its just the start,
Life is tough,
Worse than a cough,
Not at all easy,
Might make you feel quesy,
But then there is love,
As precious as a treasure cove,
The beauty of life,
Is worth the strife,
Face worries with hope,
Gradually,you will learn to cope.

Boo here!

You win some,
You lose some,
Don't take it to heart,
Its just the start,
Life is tough,
Worse than a cough,
Not at all easy,
Might make you feel quesy,Should be queasy
But then there is love,
Precious than a treasure cove, Eather needs to be More precious or As precious.
The beauty of life,
Is worth the strife,
Face worries with hope,
Gradually,you will learn to cope.

You have a skeleton of a poem here. Some lines seem like you actually had an idea to write on, and the next is like you forced the rhyme. You just forced the rhyme a lot and it ruined your poem. You need to work a lot on this. Nice try!

PM me if you have any questions!

-Boo

I don't know why but I like reviewing poetry, even though I never can write a good poem. Out of all the poetry I've reviewed this is one of my favorites.
1)I enjoyed yoour ryhmes above all else, because they gave the poem a nice flow.
2) I agree with Boo here this line

Precious than a treasure cove

should begin with more or it could be written as the following : As precious as a treasure cove.
Nice poem.

Hi there Ray. I'm here to review... or something like that.

Okay, truth is that I like the subject of your poem, it's a beautiful message. But everytime I read it I feel like you forced it to rhyme. o.0 You don't always have to make a poem rhyme, it just have to flow. Feel free to express yourself, sometimes wanting to rhyme changes what you really want to say. That's just an advice, I don't know. Also, this poem is just one sentence?

rayofhope wrote:It's just the start,

Add an apostrophe.

I think you have talent, and that you can make something big. So keep on writing! Never give up! Good job!