Gravedigger

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Don't sulk now, your job is not the worst

This guy leaves at bizarre hours, lives to unearth

with his shovel he lets the useless morsels disperse

until the hollow fits the precious that it's worth



In the dark amidst the dead the gravedigger works

singing a requiem, neglecting those who lurks



His cigarette burns as the cold wind blows

As if someone's curious, these drifting souls

far in the blackness, where no one knows

where nothing breathes where moonlight glows



On the foggy hill the gravedigger sighs

at the sight of the victim without goodbye



Dragging the thing, "oh the last thing to do"

but he never asks why, or "what happened to you?"

for no one asked him what he had gone through

although he's the only one who hears it coo,



Forgotten and gone, like the existence of fairies

the last thing to do, the gravedigger buries

just so you know, why his job is harsh and scary-

this gravedigger has to bury memories.
ಠ_ಠ




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This is really good. Just one thing--it seemed to sort of become less abstract and more straightforward in the end. The use of the word scary, for instance...I love the last line, but maybe you could try to find a different word instead of scary.
But it's really interesting. I'm guessing this is written about a gravedigger way back in the day when most funerals weren't so formal as they are today?
It's excellent. Mournful and abstract. :] i love it.
--Shackled




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I love the tone of this poem: it's really cold and...cold. (Excuse me for my lack of words right now.) I like the rhyming scheme and the two couplets.

A few things to edit:

where nothing breathes, where moonlight glows


although he's the only one who hears it coo. Here I don't know if you meant to put a full stop because I thought with the comma it didn't make much sense...


That's all. I like it! Keep writing :)
when she needs to shelter from reality she takes a dip in my daydreams




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This poem is morbid, but amazing at the same time. The description in your lines really captured my attention and the story really makes you think.
When I give up, I'm not showing weakness.
Sometimes, I'm just showing enough strength to move on.



No one achieves anything alone.
— Leslie Knope