Coward

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Coward
the coward
fights with his fist
he doesn't let others
oppinions be thought
in his eyes
only
he matters
only
his oppinions are valid
and
only he
deserves a say
in most ways
he is a tyrant
in others
he is a
follower
in both ways
he is a coward

Thankyou:)




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Hey, I liked this- it's a poem that is very sharp and to the point- I happen to be a fan of those kinds of poems.
One tiny nitpick:
- Spelling error; you have oppinions written a few times- the correct spelling is opinions.

Also, might I suggest adding a comma in one place? I know in poems it's not always necessary, however I found I was a little confused at one point:

spartacus wrote:only he
deserves a say ,
in most ways
he is a tyrant


- I found when I was reading, I didn't catch at first that it was like a change in sentence.
That's just my thoughts though; don't feel like you have to change anything, I'm just trying to think of ways to help!
Overall, I enjoyed it! :)
-Briggsy
but the sky is love and i am for you
just so long and long enough
-E.E. Cummings




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Hey, shiney1 here!

I like this poem. It is simple, to the point and very interesting.
One if the big problem I have though, is that I feel this hardly describes a coward...
I mean, this is just my viewpoint, but a coward is afraid to fight, or speak or whatever he is cowardly about, but what you described is someone who gets in people's faces, and is not afraid to speak his mind. It just didn't add up in my head.


Coward
The coward
fights with his fist;
he doesn't let others'
opinions be thought.
In his eyes
only
he matters,
only
his opinions are valid,
and
only he
deserves a say.
in most ways
He is a tyrant
in others.
He is a
follower;
in both ways
he is a coward.


Mainly punctuation and some grammar.

Good work!
"If you ever have a problem don't say 'Hey God I have a big problem.' Rather 'Hey Problem... I have a big God and it's all going to be okay."




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Its mostly just in my eyes that this describes a coward because of people I know;) Thankyou!



Of those who say nothing, few are silent.
— Thomas Neill