House of Cards

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Build a house of cards,
And put me in the middle.
Take away my heart,
But keep a crying fiddle.

Hear the wisps of music,
and crystallize the tears.
Age the stable house
to build upon my fears.

Here sobs the violin--
a coarse, sweet sound--
remains of what there was,
and what is to be found.

A single gust of wind
collapsed the house of cards.
Away went all my fears
no longer my regards.

My heart stood vaguely shattered
all upon the ground.
You broke it into pieces,
and scattered it around.

The violin that cried
still sobs among us all,
for gallant songs of heartbreak
are written in our fall.
Last edited by icanbefixed on Mon Jul 11, 2011 12:23 am, edited 1 time in total.
The hardest mountain to climb will have the greatest view. Everything at a different angle: memories serve as double vision, a view from the valleys as well as the precipice. But everything that goes up must come down.The descent from the peak will be twice as graceful & three times as difficult




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I really love this piece. House of Cards, brilliant title and it's just coming from a different angle. It's been forever since I've read a piece that's abstract and modern at the same time. It's really good and I don't think I'd change a thing =]
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I love this! I think it's really amazing! Well done :D
I came to this world with nothing,
and I leave with nothing but love
Everything else is just borrowed.




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Fantastic! At first I was worried about the inclusion of the fiddle but when I saw where you took it I thought it was amazing! The transitions to dramatic to emotional were great and the imagery of both were very thorough and complete. I loved it :D great job!
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I thought this was brilliant. Like your other works, it flows perfectly, and there is next to nothing I have to criticize about the grammar, or the meter - I liked the rhyming, and it worked as a means of making the beat more even. Overall, really great job.
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Being children of a cruel reality, we fall prey to the greater powers.
To envy.
To madness.
Betrayal.
Love.
And yet without these things, we cannot remain human. Without these things, we are nothing.
But it is the greatest sacrifice. To envy. To be mad. To betray. To love.
To be human.



The roots of education are bitter, but the fruit is sweet.
— Aristotle