The Death Of A Legend

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Perched upon a golden throne,

I will die with my scepter and the crown of a king.

A prophet, a revolutionary, a shepherd and a guide

My heart will be preserved in the hourglass of eternity.

And my soul will live on forever,

Dancing upon the thunder of immortality.


My tomb will be a temple,

A shrine of my glory--

Where my followers will burn reverential incense

And my enemies will lick the floor with their tongues.


My blood will rain down from golden clouds

And the world will drenched in the sea of my being.


My flesh will be a monument, a sculpture, a symbol,

An artwork testifying the power of dreams.


My face will shine with the splendor of the Sun,

Enveloping eternity with it's warmth.


And my voice will reverberate in the multiverse

Singing, shouting, screaming my name.


The day of my death will be a festival, a celebration.

And the streets will flood with people awed by my magnificence.

The skies will echo with hymns narrating my eminence

And the chant of my name will be upon every human tongue.

'Coz when I will die, perched upon my golden throne,

I will be a God.




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Great poem! I'm trying to squeeze some critique out of my mind... no, I can't really. Interesting subject, it reminds me of ancient Egyptians and their attitude on the afterlife. It's written very well, the vocabulary, use of imagery, and the flow/rhythm are perfect. Very truly awesome. Thanks for sharing. :D
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Excellent. Strong ending. Strong language. Strong emotion.

Dancing upon the thunder of immortality.



Good use of imagery throughout. Keep on writing. Look forward to more poems.

Sincerely,
Elitehusky




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Wow, this should be in a book somewhere! It completely reminded me of a Greek story, specifically the Odyssey. Claiming god-status in the end really put the edge on the poem and made it good. I can imagine the speaker getting struck by lightning. It also has that sort of Egyptian vibe to it. Anyway, I liked it!

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I'm literally speechless. This was AMAZING. And you're only sixteen? I congratulate you! BRAVO! :)
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