if i were her

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well i am done
with all my waiting for you...to come around
so im quitting
cause losing no...fun


i cant keep on sitting around
and i keep beleiving you find out..

that i loved you
and it was a two way street when it was only one
im done
waiting ..for you to come around...
and im waiting no more

well im silly
for dreaming about
a love when no one took a step
so im goofy
for staying to myself

i cant keep on sitting around
and i keep believing you found out

that i loved you
and it was a two way street when it was only one
im done
waiting...for you to come around
and im waiting no more

but if only
were another girl
if only
mabye id be in your world
but if only
if only
if only
IF ONLYYYYYYYYYyyyyyyyy

i cant just keep sitting around
and i keep on believing that you found out




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and it was a two way street when it was only one


I like this line a lot. It's simple but it explains things.

These are good lyrics, but I kept on getting distracted by the grammar problems. You didn't really capitalize anything, there were a few misspelled words, and a lot of missing punctuation. Even though overall the work was good, I couldn't really concentrate very well. I think that even though it's just song lyrics, you should probably fix it up a little.

The lyrics are good, don't get me wrong! I think you did a great job. :D
WE ARE DAUGHTERS of our Heavenly Father, who loves us, and we love Him.




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thnks...to tell you the truth i kinda didnt take my time on this so i wasnt really noticing /worrying about the puncuation and stuff..but im glad you liked it.



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