Inside Jokes

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The (inside) jokes
flow
through
our
mouths,
Sense no make they
but make
us
laugh.

The memories
of
silly signs,
that declare customers
park
in the behind.

The numerous things
my friends
and
I say
every
1
day,
the things
that
make
up
who we are.

The 3 hundred
random words
that only we
understand.

Like
r
a
n
d
y
and
"don't say that to Tyler!"

This is my life,
and it makes no sense.
just like the scrambled words
on
this
page.
My reality comes to a close as I once again realize that you don't love me, and even if I love you with my everything you will never care.





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Ha,ha,ha! That is funny! It looks like the conversations I have with my best friend when we are in a funky mood. I like it! I don't know that it actually counts as 'poetry' per say. Very interesting in any case!

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Well this poem is pretty stylin'! I love the line structure, it's as creative as the idea. And the examples of things that you'd say that are inside jokes really give the poem a flavor all its own. It's always good to add some specifics to be fresh and unique. I enjoyed reading this poem, it's really an experience! Keep up the good work! :D
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Haha, I was gonna comment on the line structure 'til you commented on it in-poem. :P


I especially loved the way you talked like Yoda on the line about not making sense. That was..... kind of brilliant.


I didn't understand the numbers, though, like that random "1" before "day". Couldn't you have left the 1 out? But there seemed to be some sort of significance in doing the numbers that way, since you do it again with "3 hundred words". How do you know it's three-hundred words exactly? have you counted? Because I certainly haven't counted mine. XD


Incidentally, I had a Tyler in my class once. He was a typical skater boy. (He once got a zero on a test because he argued with the teacher. He would've gotten a bad grade anyway, but...... just... you don't argue with the teacher about things like that. Just no.)


Overall, I really liked this. Your style is very unique, and I liked the whimsicalness of this poem. Thanks so much for posting it! I really enjoyed reading it.
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Hello there,

This is obviously nonsensical and not really supposed to be a very well structured poem. Still that is probably why I like this so much. The pure randomness of this whole piece of poetry is really fun and inventive. It is also just a really natural poem that is purely from the heart. I think the 1 in between every and day is really unnecessary and it ruins the fun in this. I would just leave it out and it would just have made this that extra bit better. Overall though I really liked this and I hope to see a lot more of your funny, confusing poems lying around to cheer everybody up through the power of nonsense!

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