Terrible One.

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I'm aware that is isn't finished. But I just want some advice/feedback thanks guys :)

Terrible one, terrible two, terrible three, terrible four,
Wishing is done, nothing for you, nothing for me, at the door.
You don’t understand me but I know what I’m saying today,
I don’t understand you but I know that you see your own way.

Get over it, get on with your life.
Get over it, you cant fix your strife.
Just move on, be hap-py as can be,
Just move on, you can deal without me.




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Great start so far :) i like the ryhtym of the words you've got going and i really like the second line so continue writing it and well done!
"You grow, you grow like tornado
You grow from the inside
Destroy everything through
Destroy from the inside
Erupt like volcano
You flow from the inside
You kill everything through
You kill from the inside"




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Sounds great :) Simplistic but pretty effective xXx
If you want the rainbow, you gotta put up with the rain. Jasmyn xXx



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