Love Suite

CHAPTER ONE

Arrival

Marky Federal looked out through the window of that private airplane. He would be in the sandy beaches of Bella Amor resort in any minute. He wasn't that excited to go there but his heart seemed to know everything more that he does. His heart beated rapidly as he could feel that they were getting near to that beach resort which was an isolated island in the Philippines.
His mother called him on the telephone last night. She asked him to go to the resort for a special occasion. He didn't now what the occasion was but he would want to come since all the family members of the Federal were invited to come. It have been a long time that he stayed in Germany and he also missed his family and relatives, so why not? He quickly asked his Uncle Sebastian to lend him his private airplaine.
His Uncle Sebastian stayed with him in Germany. He wasn't really his biological uncle, but he was his family's good friend. Marky left Philippines at the age of seventeen to enter college at Koblenz. His studies there were fine. He graduated two years ago and he already found a job as a writer in a German newspaper. It was impressive that he learned the language perfectly at any angle.

He saw the white clouds outside. Lots and lots of soft thin wisps of clouds. The sky was blue and he thought that the plane was so high since he couldn't see a single island or people down there. He clicked a button beside the window and the curtains automatically covered the window. He sighed and walked to the comfort room. Marky's bored. He was just alone in the plane anyway. As he got inside the comfort room, he stared at the lavatory. He forgot to unplug the drainer that's why it was filled with water. His eyes stared at it as his imaginations started to run wild.
He could imagine how Bella Amor resort looked like. Since, it was summer, the resort was filled with people and tourists. The sun was warm, the tides were inviting and the sand was soft and cozy to lie on. He could see the coconut trees that swayed by the push of the gentle summer breeze and the pretty girls on sexy swimsuits. Yes. Girls. That's his one major weakness. Girls. He took a lot of different girls to his bed for a countless number of times. Some blackmailed him to marry them after stealing their virginity while the other girls cursed him for using them as a sexual tool. He didn't really care about that.
After a lot of imaginations, he went back to his seat and turned on his laptop. He logged in to Google and typed: Satyriatic.

He felt that the plane flew lower. He decided to peek at the window. He pushed that button again to automatically remove the curtains and he saw the runway of Ninoy Aquino International Airport. He sighed in relief. He didn't like long trips and being cooped up inside a plane. He wasn't the type of guy who wanted to be bored. Neither he wanted to be isolated. How he loved to join a crowd of people and mingle with them. He would make a good Social Worker because of his social skills but, God forbid, he found that job lousy.
The plane landed gently on the runway and as Marky went out of the plane, he pulled his wheeled bag and looked for his brother, Ismael, in the airport. It wasn't that hard to find Ismael, especially if you were a girl. Ismael was that goddamn handsome black haired dude who sat on those white benches. He wore a very intelligent look. Ismael looked matured than Marky because of those nerdy glasses, but who cared about that? The nerdy glasses made the young construction firm owner very handsome. Marky tapped his brother on the shoulder as he spoke.
"Owner of the Federal Construction Firm Corporation." Marky grinned.
Ismael rolled his eyes. "You're still the same, grinning Marky of Germany."
He laughed at that remark. "Quit that crap, you're making it sound like grinning monkey."
"Why don't we just talk in the car?" Ismael smirked.
"I would love to, my brother," Marky said and followed Ismael to the car.

Nadja Paralejas pouted annoyingly like a child. She heard that Marky arrived to Philippines from Germany. How she wished that he didn't come back. She could still remember what happened to them. That had been the reason why Marky was sent to Germany in the first place. She could still remember what he exactly did seven years ago. She was so in love with him. Puppy love, maybe. Who wouldn't be attracted to Marky? The guy was naturally handsome. He smiled like an innocent seraphim and grinned like the sexiest demon from hell. One night, the Federal family had a party. Nadja or Naddie's family were also invited.
She looked so beautiful that night. She wore a white dress and white pair of high heels. She was naturally a fashionista and she became more trendy because she wanted to impress Marky. She didn't failed at that. While the people were busy at the party, Marky persuaded her to go to the seashore. She obeyed and let him pull her away from the Bella Amor hotel. It was completely dark when they got outside. She glanced at Marky's wrist watch. The clock's hands pointed that it was already 1:25 in the early morning. The air was cold and the waves kept hitting the shore.
"Beautiful Naddie." She heard his husky voice whispered in her ear as Marky's arms wrapped around her.
Naddie closed her eyes as she leaned the back of her head to his chest. His embrace gave her warmth against the chilly sea breeze and she felt so cozy.
"Make love with me," Marky whispered again. That made her open her eyes and she turned around to face him. His eyes were calm and blue. He inherited his blue eyes from his Spanish grandfather. Naddie shook her head.
"Don't be childish, dear. We're too young for that." She tried to smile at him to make it easy for him to accept her rejection to what he wanted them to do. Marky held her waist and pulled her near him.
"If people are in love, there's no limitation to hinder them."
"Oh, please, Marky, you should know that I love you but we must be responsible."
His eyes burned with desire. He shook his head as if he tried to take away an idea in his mind. That frightened her. He seemed to hear an argument inside his head until he held her closer and kissed her lips in a torrid manner. How she loved the fire from his lips and his sweet, warm breath. The kiss made her knees began to shake and she felt delirious. Suddenly, she felt his hand that tried to undress her. She quickly pushed him away. They panted as they looked at each other's eyes.
"Naddie..." he said hoarsely as he tried to walk near her.
"I already said no, Marky!" she said in a warning tone.
"But, you kissed back." He walked closer.
Naddie ran but Marky caught her. They fell down and Marky got her pinned down against the sand. He kissed her lips, down to her neck.
"Marky, no! Please, no!" She screamed at the top of her lungs until a person came to stop and pull Marky away from her. Ismael. He was with their father. Marky turned red. He felt embarrassed like a criminal who was caught in his crime.
After a week, Naddie heard about Marky's penalty. He was sent to Germany to undergo a theraphy session with a German psychologist and to continue his studies there. Now that Marky had returned, she wondered if he recovered from being satyriatic. She hoped and she prayed about it every night.

"Good morning, Ma'am!" Veronica Celoza smiled at the owner of the resort, Mrs.Federal.
"You're the receptionist, right?" the beautiful woman said.
"Yes, Ma'am," she replied with a smile.
"If ever Mark Andres Federal arrived. Tell him to go to my office, understand?" she said nicely.
"Yes, Ma'am."
Mrs. Federal smiled and left her there. Veronica took out her compact mirror and retouched her make-up. She was naturally beautiful, with or without a make-up. As she retouched, she felt the need to urinate. A chambermaid happened to pass by. Veronica stopped her.
"Can you please replace me for awhile? I really need to go to the comfort room," she said.
The kind chambermaid nodded as she went to the receptionist area.
"And if ever a Mark Andres Federal arrived, tell him to go to Mrs. Federal's office. That's her order," she added before she turned to go.
As Veronica or Ronnie left, two men arrived: Marky and Ismael.
They went to the receptionist area.
"How many suites were vacant?" Ismael asked her.
The chambermaid got nervous. She didn't know what to say. Ismael raised an eyebrow as he looked at her uniform.
He cleared his throat. "Where's the receptionist?"
"S-She just went to the comfort room," the chambermaid replied.
Ismael shook his head. "How many times do I have to tell Mama to assign two receptionists in here!"
The chambermaid stared at the blond guy who was with Ismael. Marky noticed the old woman's stare. He looked at her with questioning eyes.
"Are you, Sir Mark Andres Federal?" the chambermaid asked.
Marky nodded. "That's me, alright. Why?"
"Mrs. Federal wants to see you in her office."
Ismael glanced at him. "Mom wants to see you." He turned to look at the chambermaid. "Thank you."
When they left, Veronica went to the receptionist area.
"Who's the blond guy?" she asked the chambermaid.
"He's Sir Mark Andres Federal," the old woman said as she went out of the receptionist area.
Veronica gasped. "Oh, my! That handsome man! I think my Prince Charming has arrived."
The chambermaid wanted to giggle but she controlled herself. "I have a lot to do, Ronnie. I have to go."
"Oh." she said in shock as she glanced at the chambermaid. "Thanks a lot, Granny Fe."
The old woman nodded and left Ronnie in a dreamy state.
"Oh, Mark Andres Federal.." She thought about handsome man that made her heart beat so fast.

-end of chapter one-

This is so romantic! I love, love, love it!.. Not many people can write romance novels in this way. Your writing and your way of words is so unique. I can see very clearly that there is something special here. I feel so lucky to have stumbled upon it. Your characters, their actions, their dialogue -it all fit together so nicely. Not mushy or in a way that seemed as if the writer were trying too hard to create something they wanted to read, or that they thought was good. I honestly feel like this was written specifically for an audience. It was so charming and had an almost poetic quality to it! It reminded me of "Like water for Chocolate". That book was so very well written, and I feel also that you've begun to capture something very similar in quality to it. I encourage you to continue with this story! Really, I do. The only thing I can say needed help with was the proper punctuation. You may need to work on your editing skills a little bit. But I'm great when it comes to that, and would be more than happy to help you out so that your readers can achieve the full quality in writing you have to offer Good luck with your story, and I hope to read more in the future!

This story is so good (: I look forward to reading more of it hopefully soon !!!

Hello, Summerlove! Thanks a lot! I'll keep writing!

To SmyLing !!
---> thanks for the feedback, I was really eager to add the other chapters but I sadly need another 100 points to do that :]
And you are right about the punctuations, I wasn't really that "good editor" material. Anyway, I'm glad that you liked it. *hugs*

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CS

Hey! I’m going to do a full review on you story. Don’t worry, I’ll be nice!
I definitely like your story! And take it as a compliment from someone who doesn’t usually add romantic stories to her reading list! There were just a few grammar/spelling mistakes that I thought I would edit. I put them in Italics and I put any comments in (brackets) but you don’t have to change anything if you don’t want to, their just suggestions (apart from the spelling corrections).

Marky Federal looked out through the window of his (Here I think ‘his’ fits better than ‘that’) private airplane. He would be on the sandy beaches of Bella Amor resort in any minute. He wasn't that excited to go there but his heart seemed to know more than he did. His heart was beating (I’m sorry, I feel so embarrassed :3 because I forgot the past tense for ‘beat’ but I think ‘beated’ is wrong) rapidly as he could feel that they were getting near to that beach resort which was an isolated island in the Philippines.
His mother had called him on the telephone the night before. She had asked him to go to the resort for a special occasion. He didn't now what the occasion was but he had wanted to go since all the family members of the Federal were invited. It had been a long time that he stayed in Germany and he also missed his family and relatives, so why not? He quickly asked his Uncle Sebastian to lend him his private airplane.
His Uncle Sebastian stayed with him in Germany. He wasn't really his biological uncle, but he was his family's good friend. Marky left the Philippines at the age of seventeen to enter college at Koblenz. His studies there were fine. He had graduated two years ago and he already found a job as a writer for a German newspaper. It was impressive that he learned the language perfectly at any angle.

He saw the white clouds outside. Lots and lots of soft thin wisps of clouds. The sky was blue and he thought that the plane was so high since he couldn't see a single island or people down there. He clicked a button beside the window and the curtains automatically it. He sighed and walked to the comfort room. Marky’s bored. He was just alone in the plane anyway. As he got inside the comfort room, he stared at the lavatory. He forgot to unplug the drainer that's why it was filled with water. His eyes stared at it as his imagination started to run wild.
He could imagine how Bella Amor resort looked like. Since, it was summer, the resort would have been filled with people and tourists. The sun was warm, the tides were inviting and the sand was soft and cosy to lie on. He could see the coconut trees that swayed by the push of the gentle summer breeze and the pretty girls in sexy swimsuits. Yes, girls. That's his one major weakness. Girls. He took a lot of different girls to his bed a countless number of times. Some blackmailed him to marry them after stealing their virginity while the other girls cursed him for using them as a sexual tool. He didn't really care about that.
After a lot of imagination, he went back to his seat and turned on his laptop. He logged in to Google and typed: Satyriatic.

He heard the plane fly ‘louder’. He decided to peek at the window. He pushed that button again to automatically remove the curtains and he saw the runway of Ninoy Aquino International Airport. He sighed in relief. He didn't like long trips and being cooped up inside a plane. He wasn't the type of guy who wanted to be bored. Neither did he want to be isolated. How he loved to join a crowd of people and mingle with them. He would make a good Social Worker because of his social skills but, God forbid, he found that job lousy.
The plane landed gently on the runway and as Marky went out of the plane, he pulled his wheeled bag and looked for his brother, Ismael, in the airport. It wasn't that hard to find Ismael, especially if you were a girl. Ismael was that goddamn handsome black haired dude who sat on those white benches. He wore a very intelligent look. Ismael looked more matured than Marky because of those nerdy glasses, but who cared about that? The nerdy glasses made the young construction firm owner very handsome. Marky tapped his brother on the shoulder as he spoke.
"Owner of the Federal Construction Firm Corporation." Marky grinned.
Ismael rolled his eyes. "You're still the same, grinning Marky of Germany."
He laughed at that remark. "Quit that crap, you're making me sound like a grinning monkey."
"Why don't we just talk in the car?" Ismael smirked.
"I would love to, my brother," Marky said and followed Ismael to the car.

Nadja Paralejas pouted annoyingly like a child. She heard that Marky was arriving to Philippines from Germany. How she wished that he didn't come back. She could still remember what happened to them. That had been the reason why Marky was sent to Germany in the first place. She could still remember exactly what he had done seven years ago. She was so in love with him. Puppy love, maybe. Who wouldn't be attracted to Marky? The guy was naturally handsome. He smiled like an innocent seraphim and grinned like the sexiest demon from hell. One night, the Federal family had a party. Nadja’s- or ‘Naddie's’- family were also invited.
She looked so beautiful that night. She wore a white dress and white pair of high heels. She was naturally a fashionista and she became more trendy because she wanted to impress Marky. She didn't failed at that. While the people were busy at the party, Marky persuaded her to go to the seashore. She obeyed and let him pull her away from the Bella Amor hotel. It was completely dark when they got outside. She glanced at Marky's glow-in-the-dark (I think saying that the watch was a glow-in-the-dark one would make more sense because it’s dark) wrist watch. The clock's hands pointed that it was already 1:25 in the early morning. The air was cold and the waves kept hitting the shore.
"Beautiful Naddie." She heard his husky voice whisper in her ear as Marky's arms wrapped around her.
Naddie closed her eyes as she leaned the back of her head to his chest. His embrace gave her warmth against the chilly sea breeze and she felt so cosy.
"Make love with me," Marky whispered again. That made her open her eyes and she turned around to face him. His eyes were calm and blue. He inherited his blue eyes from his Spanish grandfather. Naddie shook her head.
"Don't be childish, dear. We're too young for that."(this part doesn’t really make sense because she says “Don’t be childish...we’re too young...” Try rewriting this bit) She tried to smile at him to make it easy for him to accept her rejection to what he wanted them to do. Marky held her waist and pulled her near him.
"If people are in love, there's no limitation to hinder them."
"Oh, please, Marky, you should know that I love you but we must be responsible."
His eyes burned with desire. He shook his head as if he tried to take away an idea in his mind. That frightened her. He seemed to hear an argument inside his head until he held her closer and kissed her lips in a torrid manner. How she loved the fire from his lips and his sweet, warm breath. The kiss made her knees begin to shake and she felt delirious. Suddenly, she felt his hand trying to undress her. She quickly pushed him away. They panted as they looked into each other's eyes.
"Naddie..." he said hoarsely as he tried to walk near her.
"I already said no, Marky!" she said in a warning tone.
"But, you kissed back." He walked closer.
Naddie ran but Marky caught her. They fell down and Marky got her pinned down against the sand. He kissed her lips, down to her neck.
"Marky, no! Please, no!" She screamed at the top of her lungs until a person came to stop and pull Marky away from her. Ismael. He was with their father. Marky turned red. He felt embarrassed like a criminal who was caught in the act(I think that sounds better).
After a week, Naddie heard about Marky's penalty. He was sent to Germany to undergo a theraphy session with a German psychologist and to continue his studies there. Now that Marky had returned, she wondered if he recovered from being satyriatic. She hoped and she prayed about it every night.

"Good morning, Ma'am!" Veronica Celoza smiled at the owner of the resort, Mrs. Federal.
"You're the receptionist, right?" the beautiful woman said.
"Yes, Ma'am," she replied with a smile.
"If ever Mark Andres Federal arrived. Tell him to go to my office, understand?" she said nicely.
"Yes, Ma'am."
Mrs. Federal smiled and left her there. Veronica took out her compact mirror and retouched her make-up. She was naturally beautiful, with or without a make-up (this seems like repetition since being naturally beautiful already means being beautiful without make-up. Anyhoo...). As she retouched, she felt the need to urinate. A chambermaid happened to pass by. Veronica stopped her.
"Can you please replace me for awhile? I really need to go to the comfort room," she said.
The kind chambermaid nodded as she went to the receptionist area.
"And if ever a Mark Andres Federal arrived, tell him to go to Mrs. Federal's office. That's her order," she added before she turned to go.
As Veronica -or ‘Ronnie’- left, two men arrived: Marky and Ismael.
They went to the receptionist area.
"How many suites were vacant?" Ismael asked her.
The chambermaid got nervous. She didn't know what to say. Ismael raised an eyebrow as he looked at her uniform.
He cleared his throat. "Where's the receptionist?"
"S-She just went to the comfort room," the chambermaid replied.
Ismael shook his head. "How many times do I have to tell Mama to assign two receptionists in here!"
The chambermaid stared at the blond guy who was with Ismael. Marky noticed the old woman's stare. He looked at her with questioning eyes.
"Are you, Sir Mark Andres Federal?" the chambermaid asked.
Marky nodded. "That's me, alright. Why?"
"Mrs. Federal wants to see you in her office."
Ismael glanced at him. "Mom wants to see you." He turned to look at the chambermaid. "Thank you."
When they left, Veronica went to the receptionist area.
"Who's the blond guy?" she asked the chambermaid.
"He's Sir Mark Andres Federal," the old woman said as she went out of the receptionist area.
Veronica gasped. "Oh, my! That handsome man! I think my Prince Charming has arrived."
The chambermaid wanted to giggle but she controlled herself. "I have a lot to do, Ronnie. I have to go."
"Oh." she said in shock as she glanced at the chambermaid. "Thanks a lot, Granny Fe."
The old woman nodded and left Ronnie in a dreamy state.
"Oh, Mark Andres Federal.." She thought about handsome man that made her heart beat so fast.

Ok, so as I said at the beginning, I really like this and again, you don’t have to use the corrections but I just thought they would be a few things to make your chapter better.
I love your characters- especially Naddie (girl power!) xD I’m proud of what she did. Oh, and I also like Marky because I can really picture him!
I’m going to check out your other chapters, because I really want to know what’s going to happen! =)

--> Hello, Mikko!

+ Thanks a lot for the help with the corrections, I admit that I really need that. Don't worry, I will edit "Love Suite" when I am done with the whole story
+ I am glad that you like the story :3 *embrace*

love,
CS

You wrote "he" a lot. There are better ways to express what is happening. It is much like saying:
"I went to the shops today. I had fun. I saw my friend and I was excited when he asked how I was."
The story sounds cute, though! I shall read the next...twenty odd chapters ^.^
Good luck with the rest!

GremlinMilkshake

--> first of all, welcome to YWS!!

--> yay! Okay, I'll keep that in mind (about the problem with repetitions)

--> anyway, thanks a lot for the feedback!