Cyborg

Serve.
Obey.
Protect.
Relay.
Message sent. Saved.

Human.
Justice.
Question.
Service.
Error.
Error.
Message deleted. Virus detected.

Fight.
Kill.
Blood.
Spill.
Red.
No blood. Only gears.
No difference detected. Initiating.

Alone.
Gears.
Emotionless
Tears.
Of burning humans.
Warning!
Warning!
System overheating.

Dust.
Gray.
Rotting.
Prey.
Achieve.
Justice.
Message recovered. Save?

Serve.
Obey.
Protect.
Relay.
Error.
System has died.

I enjoyed reading this...it's in a neat style. A neat style, a neat concept within the style. It's amazing that so few words can be used without sacrificing content. You did that pretty well...good job. The only thing I had trouble understanding was the beginning and ending stanzas. And that could be just me. So anyways. Keep up the good work. -Clay

Very enjoyable one...
It conceals a lot more that it shows...
Pretty neat...
Keep writing...

This is indeed a neat little style you've got here. Given the proper subject, such as a Cyborg, this is very creative. Normally I wouldn't be inclined to say I like this sort of poetry, but you definitely made it work. Each word feels as if it's been processed and printed out, one by one, from the mind of a machine that's constantly developing new thoughts - at one point I thought it had emotions, but.. I suppose it can't.

Interesting piece, and thank you for sharing this! I look forward to reading more from you.

What can I say? It was sort of eclectic, and about as original as you can get. Seriously, this was one freakin' awesome poem. Was it a poem? I don't quite know. But it was cool. I love your avatar, too.


-thestorygirl