Poetry in different forms.

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So this is a collection of different forms of poetry that I found in my english book. xD Enjoy, and just to tell you, I suck at grammar. xD Most of them are about the beach. Also I use the word perfect twice, but I don't know what to change it to, suggestions?

Haiku

The sun on our skins
The sound of the waves crashing
Beauty of summer.

The dry falling leaves
covering the earth below
What a beautiful sight.

Tanka

The waves swelling near
our feet sinking in the sand
horizon yet to go down
enjoying natures wonders
What a memorable day.

Cinquain

Dreaming,
about the beach
knowing it would calm me
worries, washed away with the tide
Perfect.

Word Cinquain

Beach,
dazzling, blue
shimmers,swells,comforts
my guardian and lover
Perfection.
Last edited by summerlovee on Mon Feb 21, 2011 11:35 am, edited 1 time in total.
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Hey there!

Well, the second haiku, I think that you could maybe replace the word 'site' with 'sight' maybe?
I'm not too sure about the rest of the poems and how it should be set out. But good job :)
The beach theme was also pretty cool.
Last edited by MiRaCLeS on Tue Feb 22, 2011 11:49 am, edited 2 times in total.




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Wow, I have no clue when it comes to poems,
I really like this, you make the beach sound like heaven, and I noticed you used Perfect once, then used perfection, and since there in two seperate poems, I wouldn't worry much.
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This was great :) even with all the different forms of poetry it fit so neatly together. Like a telling of a story through different languages. But it all made sense and had so much simplicity and beauty to it. I have no real critiques for you on this. And why should I? You've achieved a literary excellence here. Great work!
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