Cyberwar

Disrupt the signal, now swaying,
now pressed into the visual
screens that buzz with chemicals
and blips in the soundscape.
Shock, lightspeed, cybernetic
hibernation spreading and
targeting the masochists,
for suicides are run by gears,
and wires. Send, lend, end
program, mechanical disruptions,
and the signal dies.
Shutdown.

I enjoyed this. after reading your last piece "fracture" i enjoyed seeing how you improved and in general painted a more in depth picture. I liked it Are you interested in continuing the practice of this style? I like it

I love your style. So very different from mine. I also love the subject matter of your poems, who would know such an nice poem could be written about shutting down a computer, well that's what i think it's about. I also enjoy the rhythm and beat to your poem. It's disjointed in a good way.

Although it's a part of your style try knitting your words and phrases better. But this is not necessary as it is a part of your style and the poem wouldn't be the same if you did. Maybe next time.