Welcome to Hell

Very nice! Though, Hell's Kitchen certainly didn't come to mind! Actually, when reading this, it reminded me of the book Dorian Gray, you heard of it? It's about a man who unintentionally sells his soul to the devil for ever-lasting youth, his aging instead going into a painting given to him by a friend. There are a few spelling and grammatical errors, such as "your" instead of "you're". Nothing too big. I did love this piece, and would love to read more!

~Panda;;

Words tumble out
placing wounds where they hurt the most;
Welcome to Hell,
it seems I shall be your host I like that.

Beware of the all demons Do you mean 'beware of all the demons'?
They trick you down to where there's no light
Catty, mean and snobby
nothing you say or do is right Nice!

Laughter between each insult
Where your heart should be, there's a deep black hole
You'll do anything to get out of Hell
Maybe put a 'but' hereThe Devil wants one thing, the most precious, your soul

The negotiations are pointless
The Devil doesn't waste his time
You'll do anything to be like them
Instead of punishment, reward comes from the crime

Now your you're just like them
Plastic, perfect, pretty and fake
The Devil got you out of hell now,
down a road most of my visitors take

But now don't you see
the "perfection" you seem to achieve
Its superficial, the Devil lied

Your You're stuck in Hell forever now, your you're never going to leave.

I like this poem a lot. I really think you did an interesting job with it, congrats.

"done a road most my visitors take"

This particular quote makes me think that the devil himself is the speaker in red. I also liked how it was divided into two separate parts, but it intertwined well. I do recommend that you fix some grammar issues and think about what perspective it is from. This would be an amazing piece if you developed the red character in this piece it would really change this piece.

This is a great poem definitely keep up the superb work. I only have one suggestion change to where it hurts the most to the most sensitive areas of the body.