Socks

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Socks? Socks you say?
I have socks!
I've got toe socks, ankle socks,
Tube socks and knee socks.
I've got socks with poka-dots and socks with stripes.
I've got fancy socks and plain socks.
I have socks that are fuzzy and warm
and socks that are cool and comfortable.
I've got socks for Christmas
socks for Easter and socks for Halloween.
I even got socks for monday, tuesday, wednesday, thursday and friday!
Yep! I've got socks for every day of every week of every month of every year!
So if you need socks, well I've got them!
May all your bacon BURN! ~Calcifer "Howl's Moving Castle"




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Haha! I like this! It's very funny and different. It's kind of like Dr.Suess, very different and odd but comforting to read. There are 2 minor things that need to be fixed. Firstly, the days of the week in the 12th line should be capitalized. Then, last line should be "so, you need socks..."
Well, that's it. Hope I helped, keep writing, pm me with any questions!
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This is such a cute poem, Bacon. It reminds me of the kinds you would see in children's books. I wish I could write poems and stuff.
Hey, since you have so many socks, do you think I could steal some? I keep running out. XD
Just kidding, but seriously. lol
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Cute,informative and descriptive. The repetition word, 'socks' was used well with the adjectives you chose to use along with it. I found it a pleasant read, Veru bubbly and cheeky. Apart from the corrections already mentioned, I think it's fine, punctuality wise.

keep writing well.
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I like the base of this poem: socks. A different topic to write on and therefore, all the more difficult! That being said, it felt a bit dry, with out rhyme to it. I'm not saying all poetry needs to rhyme, certainly not, but it might help it run a bit smoother and entertain a bit more. Hope this helps! Keep writing!

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Wow, you have lots of socks! Lol, anyway nice poem. It is very different and well written. Keep writing! :D
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Very cute poem! I too love socks. I think it was mention earlier but I'll just say again that the days of the week should be capitalized. And my only other concern is that I feel you should have a comma after "well" in the last line. Other than that, very delightful poem, fun to read!



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