Deathless

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Your benthic sorrows, engraved
into the depths of this archaic
heart, now swaying, now plunging;
it beats still, pumping blood
into your face. Stalactites
drip from the crimson tooth,
sharp and gold in the dusty
corner of your skull.

And now the bones come, falling
from our endless dreamscape,
where the onyx bowl at the
rainbow’s end spews wraiths,
and screams; forever lost,
in the tremors at the ultima
of infinity.

In the distance, over that bloodied
hill, we shall find Camelot,
where we will live on in our
starlit afterlife. But now our feet tire,
but now our hands clench; as the moon
wraps its tattered blanket around us.
Watch this arrow fly, invisible,
until it pierces your throat,
and then the world drowns,
and then the bell falls from my hand,
as the second arrow is let loose.

I take your hand. Do you see Camelot?
We can reach it still, together. But no.
We are finished now,
and we walk toward the moon on the horizon.
Last edited by Kafkaescence on Wed Feb 16, 2011 4:06 pm, edited 2 times in total.
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lovely. This is very pretty. I love it so much. Be careful with capitals though. But i thought it was wonderful.
It's worth a lot of praise.




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Great job. So deep and intrensically made of emotion and weighted words and thoughts that require each reader to recollect emotional moments in their life. I loved it. Keep up the good work!




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Your poem is very deep and emotional, and very well written. Watch your caps though. I enjoyed your work and look forward to reading more of it in the future.




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all i can say is speechless
I LOVE to wright and read. It's a passion I have.




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I really liked it. My favorite part was:
And now the bones come, fallingfrom our endless dreamscape,where the onyx bowl at the rainbow’s end spews wraiths,and screams; forever lost,in the tremors at the ultimaof infinity.
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Haha nicolerosebieber said speechless, get it? Haha. Anyway great poem, reminds me of many of mine, deep, dark, emotional, complex, yet simple. But simple in a way that creates new meaning and depth. This style of writing is very difficult. I should know for what you write here is also my type pf style, similar yet different ( ramble). The details provide great insight into the human mind. They are vicious yet truthful, calming yet unsettling. This encompasses everything I love in poetry: darkness, death, destruction, immortality, and greatest of all hope. I applaud your work with a standing ovation (imagine it), keep writing and possibly review some of mine eh?
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