Little Blue Eyes

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Little Blue Eyes

Such a sweet, little face, such big blue eyes,
So expressive, they have no disguise.
So in.occent, they widen with surprise,
At anything in the untarnished skies
Of a childhood that has no lies

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This is just a short piece, and I don't really like how it ends with 'ise' all the time, but anyway...comments appreciated......




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The last line isn't as strong as the other lines. But the poems itself was okay.
Real poetry are those with the best words in the best order

~~~~~~~~Mandy~~~~~~~~~



“I don't talk things, sir. I talk the meaning of things.”
— Ray Bradbury, Fahrenheit 451