In fact, we have already been done Filled the whole way in, well almost But ima still wear it. Right next to yours Cause you Know it’s our Sudoku weekend And if he tries to burn them IMA BURN THE WHOLE WORLD!
I have to be honest, I don't understand this at all. It's short and it's unspecific and the topic jumps every other line (which isn't saying much since there's not many lines). It also seems kind of violent, but I have no idea why. Also, (don't laugh) the correct way to spell "ima" is "Imma," yes, I did just correct your slang. My suggestion is add more detail, make it less confusing, add some background as to why you're wanting to kill the whole world.....It's a bit disturbing as it is. Also, let your words carry the emotion, not punctuation or capitalization. If you have to capitalize something to get the point across, then your words aren't doing their job and you need to rephrase.
Good luck
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I think reading this damaged my brain. In fact, I'm positive I'll never be quite the same after such an...interesting experience!!! lol jk, but seriously, I didn't get this at ALL, and I'm like totally baffled. So...explain and bit more and use more imagery. Right now it's just random words thrown together in a heap - and boring words at that. Good luck!
Have I not commanded thee? Be strong and of good courage; be not afraid, neither be thou dismayed, for the lord thy God is with thee whithersoever thou goest.
I have some tips for you. Before you enter a poem, spell check it and proofread it because your spelling and grammar were off. I also didn't get what you were trying to say in this poem and I am utterly and completely confused. If you could do this to this poem I think it might turn out quite nicely. Keep writing!
Tyler.
"Is this the real life, or is this just fantasy? Caught in a landslide, no escape from reality."