Water (Rain Drop)

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Something I cooked up in less than 10 minutes. I'm not expecting it to be great, but I was bored.

Water (Rain Drop)

Falling down on earth peacefully,
Over any house, street and town,
The key bearer of growth and life,
Yet slowly making its way down.

It eats almost anything endlessly,
Without thirst or replenishment,
Blooms gardens and civilizations,
Gives fire its only punishment,

It works alone, without help,
Without a shadow or color,
Giving birth to the rainbow,
Living eternity with no cover.

An immortal substance without limits,
To its infinitely vast generosity,
Changing its state when it tires,
Lurking into cracks with curiosity.

Cycling through our earth endlessly,
Always seen and never missed,
Occasionally creating chaos around,
As storms, hurricanes, and mist.
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Nice poem there, it's perfect! I have no criticism :)
Good job on the imagery and all of that.
Keep on writing!

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This poem is great. I don't really have anything else to say. Keep writing! :)
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Great job on the poem. I really like how you used imagery, it really is a beautiful piece. :)




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I was hoping for some reviews... Oh well.. maybe next time. Thanks for the replies.
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Wow!! I really love this poem and I really love rain (partly because all we get here is snow XP Bleh!) But yeah. Grammar and punctuation are really good as is the appearance of the poem altogether. You did a nice job with imagery and explaining everything. Sorry I can't be more constructive with this, but I enjoyed this a lot. Keep writing!
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Haha! The way I wrote this makes overs feel I love rain. To be honest, I hate rain, a lot. It's just depressing.
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