Done Feeling Sorry For You

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NOTE: flash poetry. I don't feel this way yet, but I'm getting there. things are complicated as an adult. also, it's kind of a song, but it's more poetry than music right now.

I thought this would be different.
I thought that things would change.
I thought that we were special,
but I guess I'm the one to blame.

I didn't react how you wanted me to,
but what the fuck did you want me to do?
You hit me with a brick wall in the morning,
and all day, all I could think about was you.

I'm glad that you're safe,
I'm glad you're not hurt,
but why this reaction?
You've left me in the dirt.
I'm sorry that you feel this way,
I'm sorry that you hurt today,
I'm sorry, I don't know what to do,
but I'm done feeling sorry for you.




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Wow, I love this.
Short and sweet and emotional. I feel the pain yet also the power the person feels at the end for being done. However, I would like to have read more though the structure is good and I can relate to the feelings in a easy way as it is simply lai out.
Overall a great piece of poetry and I look forward to reading more.
Well done!
...The Emptiness Will Haunt You...




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I liked your work...
I could the frustration which you might have felt...
But it is too short and better use of words could have made it more strong...
Well keep up the great work which you are doing...
PM me for anything... :D
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