Untitled Chapter 2

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Ok again the story is really called Untitled and again you'll see why at the end :) If you haven't read my first chapter check it out please!! ♥

"So we meet again," he smiled.
"I guess so," I said returning his gorgeous smile.
We're in Spanish class. Mrs. Mendez told Sam to sit next to me. Incredible.
"So you take Spanish?" I asked.
"Yeah I do," he laughed.
"Right because you're in Spanish class and everything," I laughed. I'm such an idiot.
"Yeah," he said.
"So where did you live before you came here?" I asked.
"New Jersey," he said.
O my gosh, I thought. Out loud I said, "That's really cool."
"So have you lived here your whole life?" he asked me.
"Actually, no, I moved here in 7th grade. I lived in Pennsylvania." It's so cute how he actually sounds curious.
"Oh cool so we weren't too far away," he smiled. Wow. His smile gets me every time.
"Yeah that's really cool," I smiled. I hope in the future I'll come up with some better adjectives than cool.
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"Guess what!" I screamed.
"What?" Morgan asked as we walked up her porch steps.
"He's from New Jersey," I said excitedly.
"No way! That's crazy!" she squealed.
"I know!" I've loved New Jersey boys for forever. They're the best. They're so cute, and respectful, and plus a lot of them are musicians. Also who doesn't love the beach? It's no wonder I like him.
"Wow,"she said,"bye."
"Bye Maggie," I replied as I started back down the steps and towards my house which is a block away from Maggie's. As I walked I started to think about Sam. He has such a great name, and amazing looks. I'm sure the popular people will get to him by tomorrow. And then he won't care about me. Oh well. I hope that doesn't happen though.
Before I know it I'm at my house. "Hi mom," I called out.
"Hi Addy," she said. "How was your day?" she asked as I walked into the kitchen where she was cooking chicken and mashed potatoes.
"Good," I told her.
"That's great sweetie," she said. I went to my room and listened to my Ipod as I did my homework. Jonas Brothers started blasting from my speakers. I also like The All-American Rejects, The Devil Wears Prada, Bruno Mars, I'm really not picky.
"Guys, time for dinner," my mom called.
We all sat down with my dad who just got home and ate dinner. I went back upstairs and logged onto facebook.
Hey! Maggie messaged me.
Hey! I replied.
We talked about our day for a while, but mostly she just told me about hers because she already knew about my day. I look up Sam. I scroll down through the results and see his name. Four mutual friends. Crap should I add him? I don't want it to look like I looked him up. Before I can think anymore I decide what the heck and just do it. Before I knew it, it was 9:30.
G2g I told her.
Bye she replied.
I got in the shower and put on my pajamas and then curled up in bed. Reeses, my cat jumped in bed with me and I turned on the TV. The next thing I knew, it was morning.
Last edited by unsocialbutterfly on Thu Feb 24, 2011 9:03 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Hello there. :)

I went to my room and listened to my Ipod as I did my homework. Jonas Brothers started blasting from my speakers. I also like The All-American Rejects, The Devil Wears Prada, I'm really not picky.
Devil Wears Prada! I love this band. :)
You were trying to show that she could listen to everything right? Well in my head, Jonas Brothers and The All-American Rejects are pretty close when you compare their styles... I would rather go with rap or something in the middle of pop/punk and post-hardcore/screamo... If you understand what I'm trying to say. It's just an idea. :)
"Guys comma, time for dinner," my mom called.
We all stayed (?) down with my dad who just got home and ate dinner. I went back upstairs and logged onto Facebook.
Hey! Maggie messaged me.
Hey! I replied.
We talked about our day for a while, but mostly she just told me about hers because she already knew about my day. Before I knew it comma, it was 9:30.
G2g I told her.
Bye comma she replied.
I got in the shower and put on my pajamas and then curled up in bed. Reeses, my cat jumped in bed with me and I turned on the TV. The next thing I know comma it was morning.

You were confusing your verb tense towards the end. Watch out for that. Also, this was a fairly short chapter, which is good. But I would like some more information. How was the end of the day? Did she met him again in the hallways, at lunch? What other classes did she have? Does she has brothers and sisters at home? I think she should add Sam on Facebook and wait anxiously for him...? I don't, it's just an idea. :) Build on that, give us just a little bit more, and you should be good. This story has a lot of potential.

Keep up the good work!

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Ok I really like your story but you need some depth. Why does Addy love Jersey boys? How does the rest f her day go? What other classes does she have? Did she see him during lunch or un the gall? Just some more details would be nice. Other than that I really like your story. Keep up the good work and kep writing. :)
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