Cry to the Moon

Something I wrote quite a while back to go with a story I was planning to start at some point. Hope you guys like it, poetry isn't really my strong point so any critique will be appreciated.


Listen to the choir,
Hear them howl.
Can you hear?
No, never will you hear.

Because you will not listen.

I hear it.
The throaty chorus
Calling, pleading, grieving
Crying to the moon.

Aid shall never come
Not for them
Yet still they sing
For an audience deaf

Heartless ears shall never listen

I listen
As does our gracious moon
Her glow ethereal
Bathing them with love eternal.

She weeps
They howl
I listen

Each night heads raise high
In unison shall they cry to the moon

Yay you put it up ^^

AWESOME, i loved this. it was great. It wasn't every descriptive (but who cares, right?) rating out of five: four. this was mysterious and very strange in a good way. only thing:

I hear it.The throaty chorus Calling, pleading, grievingCrying to the moon.

is "throaty" a word? it could be but it sounds out of place in this calm poem.

my favorite part was

Aid shall never comeNot for themYet still they singFor an audience deafHeartless ears shall never listen

keep writing! i'd really love to read more.

best wishes, Nessa

First of all, WELCOME! I joined a couple days ago, just to tell you.

I really enjoyed this. As a matter of fact, I couldn't find any mistakes that were not already said. The title really popped out at me, good job on that! I like the feminity within it, alot of wolves are linked with girls; not trying to be sexist! It added depth to it, really. You left a cliffhanger, I would say. I read "And I listen" etc. But, I like cliffhangers, don't get me wrong. You never said "Oh, I'm, like, a wearwolf person thingy and only I can hear them" so, I kept wondering,
"Does she have some sort of power, or does she just connect with the earth?!"
That's a great thing for you. It makes people want to read more.

Again, welcome! I am now following you, by the way. I really liked this poem, great job!

I listen
As does our gracious moon

i might replace it with something like, "just like"

Thanks for the comments, glad you all liked it.

I'm pretty sure that throaty is a word, though maybe it should be ie instead of y? At any rate I like to think it's close enough that most people won't think too much about it. I couldn't really think of another word to put instead so maybe you could offer some possible alternatives for me to try out?

Actually the character is completely ambiguous, though it could very well be Hunter who is male and a regular human, the only difference between him and other people is that he is in love with one of them and so he's far more open and able to empathise with them far better.

Hmm, okay I will try replacing the 'as does' with 'just like' and see which one works best. Thank you for the suggestion!

Thank you all again for the feedback, it's much appreciated!

Great job I love the image it gave me of a choir howling to the moon. Imagery is always the first I look for in a poem. So with that, I liked it.

I would use a word other than "throaty". I don't know either if it is a word, but it makes me think "well, no wonder nobody will listen. They're terrible." That wasn't what you were going for, was it?

No that really wasn't what I was going for at all. And I have had a look for alternatives for the term throaty but I am having some difficulty, do you maybe have any that you can suggest for me?

I really like the concept of the piece, and the image of the choir calling to the moon. The way you word your sentences was a bit confusing at first, but the more I read through it sounded like it went with the poem. You went for the more complex way of writing some of your sentences.. which sort of reminds me of old choir songs in an aged, but beautiful, cathedral.. or something along those lines. My only suggestion is your word choice - there are some places where some more concise words could go - but then again this is a rather simply put poem (with a big meaning), and in that sense I think it's fine the way it is. Good write.