Ode to the Bench

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Ok, not my best, but it's a first try to an ODE. Tell me what you think!

It sits there
Day after day
Waiting to be warmed
By a passing bum
Urning for the sun
to melt away the frost.
It bows under weight
groans and moans
Stands even when it snows
Hidden in a different world.
Ode to the bench
With it's chipped paint
gnarled edges
Graffiti-ed planks.
If you want to be a great writer, don't think about what you're going to write, just write it.

I'm a huge fan of writers block! When your brain halts, with no direction for where you should go, it gives you threads. All you have to do is pull and unravel the story you're meant to write.




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I like this, simple yet descriptive.
Though I think it could be stronger as a longer piece of poetry as I would of liked to of read more.
I have a idea of the Bench, but imagery of the surroundings its in would be nice.
This is a piece though that made me smile :)
...The Emptiness Will Haunt You...




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It was a good yet short ode...
But it has a very abrupt end... Was not at all convincing.... It could have been more longer and more detailed...
Try working on it mate... Its a unique idea...
Keep writing... :)
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