Innocent Demons

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This came to me randomly in the middle of the night. I hope you enjoy!

You be black,
and I'll be white,
we'll paint the town grey,
just for tonight.

They all
said we'd never last,
but they underestimate
the power of white and black.

Raging black demons,
pure white innocence,
together we make
a balance they can't comprehend.

Let's show them what happens
when black and white collide,
just for
tonight.

The innocent demons
we are,
they'll never understand
our different hearts.

I find this really good and a showing of equality in difference.
Makes me smile and makes me want to read more of simular pieces
You are talented.

Thank you very much There is more to come!

Hey,
I really like this! ^^ I loved your use of extreme contrast (black and white) and your wording had a good rythym to it.
Nothing to critique really... But great idea and well done. (Wow. That was useless, but oh well...)
It's funny how ideas in the middle of the night tend to be the best, happened to me many times.
Keep writing!

Yours truly,
|Life|

Oh, and welcome to YWS!

Thank you ^.^ I don't know what sparked it exactly, the first verse just popped into my mind and I had to write it down, and it turned into "Innocent Demons".

I have to admit I didn't immediately click on this post...it took me a good half hour to give in to my curiosity and it was very good! Great wording! Keep writing!

Thank you for giving into your curiosity!

Great work. Here are some quibbles:

Raging black demons,
pure white innocence,
together we make
a balance they can't comprehend.

This stanza I would recommend reworking. "Raging" and "demon" are two words that go together quite often; I would go for originality and say something less cliched. "Together we make" is also very cliched. Finally, as a reader, "a balance they can't comprehend" struck me as not quite what you were trying to establish. I would stick with the word "balance," but rewrite the rest.

Time for some applause on the better parts.

just for
tonight.

This I loved, especially your cunning division of the sentence between the two lines. This is strong.

Overall, I very much enjoyed reading this, and hope you find my review helpful.

Thank you, and I did find it helpful. Though I must say, this was a different way of telling the classic forbidden love story, I understand what you mean about the parts being cliched and didn't think about that before. Thank you for taking the time to review my piece!