It is good, it definitely conveyed the story the way you said you were trying to. I especially liked the third stanza where Delilah's hate for Samson is really made clear, and stated with its own quiet eloquence. The only possible issue that I see is that some of your line breaks are just the smallest bit awkward, but that's just my opinion.
Hope this helped, sorry if it didn't,
Azula
They, are not your MUFFINS!!!!!!!!!! - John Worthing/Ernest Moncrieff (The importance of being Ernest)
Its different how it has a opposite perspective from the biblical story. It percieves more logic, of course she would be angry . Its short but cunning...i like it a lot, for acclaim it may need maybe just one more stanza- possible on the effects of deliah for cutting the hair (did she revel in her power while he the weak one, does she justify this action or did she condemn herself for going through with it. Or another one of how people percieve her, a sellout. I heard this song thats a lot like this, its about the other side of deliah and her story. You did an excellent job of breaking up the stanzas, I commend you for that. To break up the stanzas like you did added another level to it with natural flow.
For once, I don't have a single bad thing to say. This was really, really good. I even liked the lack of capitals, as it projected the sheer anger of the protagonist and her state of mind. Not many people think about the fact that a lot of people are killed in the Bible, and not just bad ones. Great job, and very thought-provoking.
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