behind my broken 2-way mirror

i apologize for the format!

Ive feared my mistakes to face them to look and to listen

Ive sat here alone behind my 2 way mirror

Watching life go on while I sit behind the scenes

Ive been alone as long as I can remember

Watching and waiting

Fearing and tearing

Ive watched it all go from my life



I was afraid of my own mistakes

To make them and be crushed by the problems ive caused

But now when I look ahead all I see is me alone

Behind that 2 way mirror

Alone and forgotten

Like a fossil never unearthed

A face never known



Maybe its time

To start again

To break free

From me



All that I really fear is me

All that’s there to run from

All that I see

All that is me

Is about to change for the better



Ill take my first step

Without my regret

Hoping to live free

I smash the glass

And live



But what did I expect to find?

Streets paved with gold

Without being told

What im expected to be

This isn’t me

This worlds corrupt



So for now I think ill go back

to sitting alone

counting the days

till finally its time

to break free

to a world

Excepting me



So I go and hide

Behind my broken two way mirror



And when its time

Ill break free of this tragic tale

Move on and move forward before I disappear



Its time I set a path for my life to go

To look and to listen to the problems ive caused

And when I break free

For real this time

Ill walk on the broken glass of my mistakes

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britishwannabe wrote:iI apologize for the format!

IveI've feared my mistakes to face them to look and to listen

Ive sat here alone behind my 2two.....if the number is less than ten or twenty you should always spell it out way mirror

Watching life go oncomma while I sit behind the scenes

IveI've been alone as long as I can remember

Watching and waiting

Fearing and tearing

IveI've watched it all go from my life



I was afraid of my own mistakes

To make them and be crushed by the problems iveI've caused

But now when I look ahead all I see is me alone

Behind that 2 twoway mirror

Alone and forgotten

Like a fossil never unearthed

A face never known



Maybe its time

To start again

To break free

From me



All that I really fear is me

All that’s there to run from

All that I see

All that is me

Is about to change for the better



IllI'll take my first step

Without my regret

Hoping to live free

I smash the glass

And live



But what did I expect to find?

Streets paved with gold

Without being told

What im I'mexpected to be

This isn’t me

This worlds corrupt



So for now I think illI'll go back

to sitting alone

counting the days

till finally itsit's time

to break free

to a world

Excepting me



So I go and hide

Behind my broken two way mirror



And when its it'stime

Ill I'llbreak free of this tragic tale

Move on and move forward before I disappear



Its time I set a path for my life to go

To look and to listen to the problems iveI've caused

And when I break free

For real this time

Ill I'llwalk on the broken glass of my mistakes

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Overall? Good, you had a lot of mistakes involving the apostrophe and I fixed those. The errors are in red. Well my edits. I like the song a lot and I think if you were to fix these mistakes you could have yourself a good song. Like I pointed out before when the number is twenty or less you should spell it out you can always spell out numbers less than a hundred but you need to spell out ones less than twenty. Also when you say [color=#FF0000]its as in it is it needs to be IT'S not its. Ok well PM me if you would like me to review more of your work. Lots of love. Jenn[/color]

Hey there! Great song. I have to agree with hockeyfan87's comments. The grammar is taking away from the song's potential. It's very distracting. But anyway, after you fix those, I think you'll have a pretty nifty song on your hands! XD